Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğal ve akıcı olmalı; konuyu doğrudan yanıtlayıp, kısa ve tutarlı destekleyici cümleler ekleyin. Örneğin duygularınızı ve neden bisikletiniz olmadığını net bir şekilde açıklayın. Gereksiz tekrarları ve karışık zaman kullanımlarını (ör. 'I was, I cried and sad boy') düzeltin. Bağlaçları uygun şekilde kullanarak cümlenizi mantıklı bir akışla bağlayin (for example, because, so). Ayrıca maksimum 5 cümle kuralına uyun.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. As a result, I often watched other children ride and felt left out. Sometimes I would run after them, which made me feel sad. Looking back, it taught me to appreciate small things more.

제안: Cevap daha spesifik ve güncel olmalı; tarihi referansı doğru ve net ifade edin (örneğin 'in the 19th century' yerine). Görüşünüzü desteklemek için günümüzdeki durumu belirtin ve bağlaçlarla açıklama yapın. Kelime seçiminde ve gramerde netlik sağlayın (ör. 'it becomes less popular' -> 'it has become less popular'). Kısa ve açık cümleler kullanın.

예시: Bicycles were once very popular, especially in the mid-20th century, as a common child's toy and cheap transport. However, today they are less common in some cities because more people use cars and public transport. On the other hand, cycling is becoming popular again in urban areas due to health and environmental concerns.

× No, I didn't have a bike because of that. I was, I cried and sad boy. Therefore I was looking after all the time the kids, uh, running a running with the bicycle and watching that is a crying experience.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike. Because of that, I cried and felt sad. I was always looking after the kids, watching them run with their bicycles, and that was a upsetting experience.

The original contains multiple sentence structure problems: run-on sentences, incorrect word order, and inappropriate forms (e.g., 'I cried and sad boy' and 'running a running with the bicycle'). Suggestions: split into clear sentences; use correct verb forms (felt sad), correct adverb placement (always looking after), and parallel structure for listing actions (watching them run with their bicycles). Ensure each clause has a subject and verb and logical connectors. Grammar problem type ID:26

× In the 19th, the bike was a symbol of a child. That it is. It is that having a big moment, having a big step in the street, and then suddenly it becomes less popular than that times.

✓ In the 1900s, the bicycle was a symbol of childhood. It had a big presence in the streets, but then it became less popular over time.

Errors include incorrect time expression ('In the 19th' should be 'In the 1900s' or 'In the 19th century') and inconsistent tense/awkward phrasing ('That it is. It is that having a big moment' is ungrammatical). Suggestion: use a clear past-tense narrative ('was', 'had', 'became') and correct time phrases; replace vague expressions with concise ones ('big presence' instead of 'big moment'). Grammar problem type ID:5