Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Overall this is a natural and detailed answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make the language more concise, correct the phrase "raising my friends" (likely meant "racing" or "bringing") and add a brief linking phrase to show sequence or contrast. Also avoid minor redundancy (e.g., "every day that summer" and "around the neighborhood" both give location/time — keep one if needed).

예시: I did. When I was 13 my dad bought me a red, full‑size bike that was slightly too tall, but I was thrilled because it gave me more independence. I rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day that summer, and I remember racing my friends down the street after class.

제안: This answer is coherent, uses linking words ("however"), and gives specific reasons and examples. To raise the score further, start with a fuller topic sentence rather than a short "Not really," and add a brief comparison or prediction to enrich the response. Also be careful to keep under five sentences and maintain conciseness.

예시: Bikes aren’t very popular overall. Most people prefer motorcycles because they are faster and more convenient on crowded streets, especially during rush hour. However, I often see commuters cycling to work in the mornings, particularly near parks and in quiet residential neighborhoods where dedicated bike lanes make cycling safer; I think cycling will grow if more lanes are added.

× When I was 13 my dad bought me a red full size bike that was a bit too tall, but I was thrilled because it finally gave me more independence.

✓ When I was 13, my dad bought me a full-size red bike that was a bit too tall, but I was thrilled because it finally gave me more independence.

The original sentence has minor word order and hyphenation issues. 'Full size' should be hyphenated as 'full-size' when used as a compound adjective before a noun, and adjective order in English prefers size before color (full-size red bike vs red full-size bike). Add a comma after the introductory time clause 'When I was 13' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day that summer, and I still remember raising my friends down the street after class.

✓ I rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day that summer, and I still remember racing my friends down the street after class.

The verb 'raising' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'racing' (competing in speed) or 'riding with' friends. 'Raising' means to lift or to bring up, which doesn't fit. This is a word choice error affecting sentence meaning and structure. Replace with 'racing' to convey competing on bikes. This maps to Sentence structure errors (ID 26) because the wrong verb breaks the sentence meaning.

× However, I often see commuters cycling to work in the mornings, particularly near parks and in quiet residential neighborhoods where dedicated bike lines make cycling.

✓ However, I often see commuters cycling to work in the mornings, particularly near parks and in quiet residential neighborhoods where dedicated bike lanes make cycling easier.

The phrase 'where dedicated bike lines make cycling' is incomplete; it needs an object or complement such as 'easier' to complete the idea. Also, 'bike lanes' is the common term rather than 'bike lines'. This is a sentence structure/word choice error (ID 26) because the clause lacks a required complement and uses a less natural noun. Add 'easier' and change to 'bike lanes' to make the sentence grammatically complete and natural.