Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar ("when I was a child"), and give one or two specific supporting details linked logically (e.g. how long you used it or a memory). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child, but I did have a red tricycle. I used it for about three years and I remember riding it in the park near my house every weekend. It was my favorite toy because it gave me independence and confidence.

제안: Answer directly, reduce hesitation, and organize supporting reasons with linking words. Use correct collocations ("use bicycles to commute"), avoid repeating 'so yes'. Provide two concise reasons and an example to support your view.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially among university students. They often use bicycles to commute to campus because they are cheap and convenient in traffic. For example, many students park bikes near lecture halls and cycle short distances every day.

× Uh, no, I didn't uh, have the bicycle, uh, when I was child, but yeah, I did have the tricycle, uh, like with three tires, uh, with three vehicles, uh, and I used it uh, for a quite long time period, yeah.

✓ Uh, no, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child, but I did have a tricycle with three wheels, and I used it for quite a long time.

The original sentence has multiple issues: missing article before 'child' ('a child'), unnecessary fillers and repeated hesitations, awkward phrase 'the bicycle' (use 'a bicycle' for general reference), 'three tires' and 'three vehicles' are incorrect (use 'three wheels'; 'vehicles' is wrong), and 'for a quite long time period' is wordy and unidiomatic (use 'for quite a long time' or 'for a long time'). Also the sentence structure is run-on and benefits from simplification. Suggestion: remove filler words, use correct articles, use 'wheels' for bicycles/tricycles, and simplify time expression.

× Uh, yes, uh, I do, uh, think so. Bikes are very popular among university students, so they use bicycle to commute for their university and academies as well as it's quite cheap if we compare with the car. So yes.

✓ Yes, I do think so. Bikes are very popular among university students, so they use bicycles to commute to university and to academies; they are also quite cheap compared with cars.

Problems: 'use bicycle' lacks plural and article; change to 'use bicycles' for general habit (or 'use a bicycle'). 'Commute for their university' is incorrect preposition and determiner; use 'commute to university' (no article for general institutions) and 'to academies'. 'It's quite cheap if we compare with the car' has article and comparison errors: use 'they are also quite cheap compared with cars' or 'compared with a car'. Also remove filler 'uh' and break into clearer clauses. Suggestion: pluralize nouns when speaking about general habits, use correct prepositions ('commute to'), and use correct comparative phrase 'compared with' or 'compared to' with plural/general nouns.