Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make the time detail more realistic or concise (saying 'from morning to late afternoon' instead of exact hours), add one brief reason or feeling to enrich the response, and avoid overly long time ranges. Also use a linking word to connect the routine and the reason.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride my small red bike every day, usually from morning to late afternoon, cycling around the park with my friends because we loved racing each other and exploring new paths.

제안: Good direct answer with reasons. To improve, correct the small grammar issue ('learn to ride when they are young' or 'learn to ride at a young age'), and add a linking word to connect points (for example, 'for example' or 'moreover'). Provide a specific example or statistic to make the claim more concrete.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, most children learn to ride at a young age, and moreover many adults use bicycles for short commutes because they are inexpensive and convenient in crowded cities.

× Most children learn to ride by when they are young, and many adults use bicycles for short commutes because they are cheap and are convenient.

✓ Most children learn to ride when they are young, and many adults use bicycles for short commutes because they are cheap and convenient.

The phrase 'learn to ride by when they are young' contains an extra preposition 'by' that is unnecessary and incorrect. Remove 'by' so the correct expression is 'learn to ride when they are young.' Additionally, the clause 'because they are cheap and are convenient' repeats the auxiliary 'are' before 'convenient' unnecessarily; use 'cheap and convenient' for parallelism and conciseness.