Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Fix grammar and use a clear topic sentence + one or two supporting details. Start with a simple past tense statement, then add specifics (who gave it, at what age, how you felt or what you did with it). Use linking words like “when” or “and” correctly and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was ten years old. My mother gave it to me for my tenth birthday, and I rode it every day around the neighborhood. It made me feel independent and helped me make friends nearby.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (because, although, however). Correct articles and word order (e.g., “Hong Kong is a city,” “there are not many bicycle lanes”). Be concise and avoid unfinished sentences.

예시: Not really. Hong Kong is a very crowded city, so there are not many dedicated bicycle lanes, and traffic makes cycling less safe. However, cycling is becoming more popular in parks and on new waterfront promenades.

× Yes indeed, I had a bike when I ten years old.

✓ Yes indeed, I had a bike when I was ten years old.

The sentence refers to a past time, so past tense 'was' is required as the verb to link the subject 'I' and age. The original omits the verb 'was'. Use 'I was ten years old' to indicate age in the past. Suggestion: Include the appropriate past form of the verb 'to be' (was) when stating age in the past.

× My mother gave me when I ten years old birthday.

✓ My mother gave it to me for my tenth birthday.

The original sentence misorders and omits words. When describing a gift in the past, use past tense 'gave' correctly and include the object ('it') and the preposition 'to' for the indirect object. Also, express the age as 'my tenth birthday' or 'when I was ten'. Suggestion: Use the structure 'My mother gave it to me for my tenth birthday' or 'My mother gave me a bike when I was ten.'

× No, because the Hong Kong is a city and then the there was not a lot of bicycle road to bike so.

✓ No, because Hong Kong is a city, and there are not many bicycle lanes.

Several issues: 'the Hong Kong' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' before a proper noun (Article errors); 'there was not a lot of bicycle road' mixes singular/plural and wrong noun form. The appropriate structure uses 'there are not many' for plural 'bicycle lanes' in present tense because the question asks about general popularity now. Also 'lanes' is the correct term for dedicated bicycle paths. Suggestion: Remove 'the' before 'Hong Kong', use present tense 'there are not many', and use 'bicycle lanes' instead of 'bicycle road'. Use commas to join clauses for clarity.

× There are.

✓ There are not many bicycle lanes.

The fragment 'There are.' is incomplete and does not convey the intended meaning. It should be combined with the previous clause or completed to state what 'there are'. In context, the speaker likely meant 'There are not many (bicycle lanes)'. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; complete the thought by specifying what exists or does not exist (for example, 'There are not many bicycle lanes').