Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence using correct tense, then give one or two specific details. Use linking words and avoid hesitation sounds. For example, correct verb forms (“I had a bike”), plural/singular agreement, and concise description (e.g. “a four-wheeled bike, like a tricycle”).

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small four-wheeled bike, similar to a tricycle, with a padded saddle and a second seat behind for a friend or a doll. I used to ride it in my neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me learn balance and coordination.

제안: Work on fluency and vocabulary precision, reduce hesitations, and use linking words to structure the answer. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific supporting reasons and examples (e.g. urban cycling paths, bike-sharing schemes, commuter use). Correct word choices (e.g. “ride a bike”, “cyclists”, “in the city center”).

예시: Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in my country, especially in major cities. This trend is driven by new cycling lanes and bike-sharing programs, so many commuters now ride bicycles to avoid traffic. For example, in the city center you can see groups of cyclists and people using shared bikes for short trips.

× Uh, I have a bike when I were child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence describes a past situation, so past tense should be used. 'Have' should be past 'had', and 'were' is incorrect for singular first/third person in past simple — use 'was'. Use 'a child' with the article. Suggestion: use past simple 'had' and 'was' for past descriptions.

× It is a bike with four wheels and have a saddle uh and also have saddle in behind and it is look like uh.

✓ It was a bike with four wheels and a saddle, and it also had a saddle at the back; it looked like this.

Maintain past tense to match 'I had'. 'Is' should be 'was', 'have' should be 'had', and 'have saddle in behind' is ungrammatical — use 'had a saddle at the back'. 'It is look like' should be 'it looked like'. Also include the article 'a' before 'saddle'. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past simple and use correct word order: 'had a saddle at the back' and 'looked like'.

× Bikes are increasingly popular in my country, especially uh, in the main city.

✓ Bikes are increasingly popular in my country, especially in the main cities.

The original 'in the main city' likely meant larger urban areas; use plural 'main cities' or specify 'the main city' if referring to a single city. 'Are increasingly popular' is correct present passive progressive sense. Suggestion: choose singular or plural noun to match meaning; use 'main cities' for general statement.

× In the big city, many people write to uh, bike, uh, cycling uh, around the car, uh, the city and also there are many uh, bikers group.

✓ In the big cities, many people ride bikes, cycling around the city, and there are also many bikers' groups.

Multiple errors: 'write to bike' is wrong verb — should be 'ride bikes'. Word order and extra fillers disrupt structure. 'Around the car, the city' is unclear; change to 'around the city'. 'Bikers group' needs plural possessive or plural noun: 'bikers' groups' or 'biker groups'. Keep consistent plural 'cities' if generalizing. Suggestion: use 'ride bikes' for the action, simplify to 'cycling around the city', and pluralize/group nouns properly: 'bikers' groups' or 'biker groups'.