Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (who bought it, what kind, how you used it). Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words (uh, so). Link ideas with simple connectors (because, so, and). Practice pronouncing key words (bought, bike) and limit to 2–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was about eight, and it was a small blue bicycle with training wheels. I used it to ride around our neighborhood almost every day because it was my main way of playing with friends.

제안: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and a short example. Use simple clear sentences and correct word order (Subject + Verb). Use linking words such as because or however. Avoid repeating words and filler noises. Mention whether you mean cities or rural areas and be specific about transport alternatives.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars or motorbikes because roads are busy and cycling infrastructure is limited. For example, in cities there are few bike lanes, so many families choose scooters or cars for safety and convenience.

× Yes, uh, I buy it when I child, uh, uh, my father bought uh boat bike and uh, when I see so uh, I wear uh being helped.

✓ Yes, I bought one when I was a child; my father bought a dirt bike, and when I saw it I was very excited and he helped me ride it.

The student used present tense verbs ('buy', 'see') and omitted 'was' for past states; the context is about childhood so past tense is required. Also missing 'was' before 'a child' and unclear nouns: 'boat bike' likely 'dirt bike'. Recommended correction: use past simple ('bought', 'saw') and past continuous/passive where appropriate ('was very excited', 'he helped me ride it'). Suggestions: practice forming past simple for regular and irregular verbs, include auxiliary 'was' for past states, and connect clauses with conjunctions (and, when) for clarity.

× Yes, uh, I buy it when I child, uh, uh, my father bought uh boat bike and uh, when I see so uh, I wear uh being helped.

✓ Yes, I bought one when I was a child; my father bought a dirt bike and when I saw it he helped me ride it.

The student omitted articles and used incorrect noun forms: 'it when I child' needs 'a child' and 'boat bike' is incorrect noun choice; 'one' or 'a bike' is appropriate. Use 'a child' (singular with article) and 'a dirt bike' or 'a bike'. Suggestions: always use articles with singular countable nouns ('a'/'the'), and choose the correct noun form (bike, not 'boat bike').

× Who can say motor Yeah not driving in my country.

✓ Most people use cars or trucks; motorcycles are not common for daily driving in my country.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and demonstratives ('Who can say motor') and lacks clear subject. A proper subject ('most people') and correct noun ('motorcycles') clarify meaning. Also restructure to match intended idea that people prefer cars/trucks. Suggestions: identify the subject (people) and use plural nouns for general statements ('motorcycles'), and reorder to 'Most people use...; motorcycles are not common...'.

× In my country not popular the park because my my country try driving car or in truck also not popular.

✓ Bicycles are not very popular in my country because people prefer driving cars or trucks.

The original has wrong preposition order ('in my country not popular the park') and incorrect placement of 'in'. It also repeats 'my'. The corrected sentence places subject first and uses 'in my country' at beginning, with 'prefer driving cars or trucks' expressing reason. Suggestions: start with the subject, use correct prepositions ('in my country'), avoid repetition, and use 'prefer' to show choice between options.