Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, fluent and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence about having a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details (age, reason, how you got it). Use correct grammar (past tense: "I had" not "I have" for childhood), correct articles and numbers, and smoother linking (e.g., "because", "so"). Reduce hesitations like "uh".

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about six years old because most of my friends already had one and I wanted to join them. I persuaded my parents to buy it for me, and learning to ride helped me feel more confident and independent.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief example. Use correct grammar and complete sentences, avoid repetitions and hesitations. Instead of vague fragments, explain why bikes are less popular (e.g., dense public transport, hilly terrain, safety concerns) and conclude succinctly.

예시: Not really. In Hong Kong bicycles are less popular because the public transport system is very efficient and many areas are crowded or hilly, which makes cycling inconvenient. For example, I usually take the MTR or bus for daily trips rather than cycling because it is faster and safer.

× Yes, definitely so uh, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, definitely. I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in childhood (past). The original uses present tense 'have' which is inconsistent. Change to past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense when describing past situations, e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× I had a bike when uh around uh six year old and it is because my friends, they all have had a bike and I was very scared.

✓ I had a bike when I was around six years old because my friends all had bikes and I was very scared.

Multiple tense and grammar errors: use past tense 'was' for age ('was six years old'), use plural 'bikes' when referring to multiple friends, and use simple past 'had' not present perfect 'have had' for completed past possession. Remove redundant pronoun 'they'. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense and correct noun plurals: 'I had a bike when I was around six years old because my friends all had bikes.'

× So I want to overcome it.

✓ So I wanted to overcome it.

This refers to a past motivation, so past tense 'wanted' is required rather than present 'want'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame already established: 'I wanted to overcome it.'

× So I uh pers persuade my parents to buy 1 for me.

✓ So I persuaded my parents to buy one for me.

The action happened in the past, so use the simple past 'persuaded' rather than a present or incorrect form. Write numbers as words in formal speech: 'one'. Suggestion: Use correct past verb form and standard word form: 'I persuaded my parents to buy one for me.'

× So I don't think so because I live in Hong Kong and Hong Kong had have a a perfect.

✓ So I don't think so because I live in Hong Kong and Hong Kong has a very good

The sentence mixes past and present ('had have'). When describing a current state, use present tense 'has'. Also 'a perfect' is incomplete and awkward; use 'a very good' or 'an excellent' with a following noun. Suggestion: Use present tense for current facts: 'Hong Kong has an excellent...' and complete the phrase with the noun. Note: The original fragment lacks the noun after 'perfect', so include the noun in the next correction line.

× Transportation system so I think it's the citizens don't need to ride the bike to get the.

✓ transportation system, so I think citizens don't need to ride bikes to get around.

Pronoun and article usage errors: 'it's the citizens' is incorrect—use 'citizens' without 'the' in this general sense. 'Ride the bike' should be plural 'ride bikes' when speaking generally. Also 'get the' is incomplete; the correct phrasal verb is 'get around'. Suggestion: Use general nouns without 'the' for general statements and plural nouns for general habits: 'citizens don't need to ride bikes to get around.'