Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise, start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronoun usage, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't. I grew up in a very crowded neighborhood with no nearby park, so there wasn't a safe place to ride. For that reason my parents decided not to buy a bike.

제안: Begin with a direct opinion, use clearer reasoning and examples, correct awkward phrasing, and use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'because') to make the answer coherent. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and include a specific example or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, to some extent. Many people use bikes to commute short distances in cities because they are cheap and convenient; however, they are less popular for long journeys since riding for a long time can be tiring. For example, in my city cyclists usually use bikes for trips under 5 km.

× No I didn't because where I lived as a child was very crowded area so we can't go out for biking like for long hours and there was no park near it so didn't have a bike while growing up.

✓ No, I didn't, because where I lived as a child was a very crowded area, so we couldn't go out biking for long periods, and there was no park nearby, so I didn't have a bike while growing up.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure and tense consistency issues. Problems include missing articles ('a very crowded area'), incorrect tense/modal usage ('we can't' should be past 'we couldn't' to match 'lived' and 'didn't'), awkward phrasing ('go out for biking like for long hours' is informal and ungrammatical), and a missing subject in the second clause ('so didn't have a bike' needs subject 'I'). Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, keep past tense consistent, add necessary articles and subjects, and use natural collocations such as 'go out biking for long periods' and 'park nearby'.

× To some extent yes they are popular, like many people use them to commute for their work daily.

✓ To some extent, yes, they are popular; many people use them to commute to work every day.

The original sentence is understandable but has punctuation and preposition problems. 'For their work daily' is awkward; the natural collocation is 'commute to work' and 'every day' instead of 'daily' in this context. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'commute to work every day' and proper punctuation.

× But other than that I don't think they are very popular as it takes people to travel a lot with them and they are very exhausting.

✓ But other than that, I don't think they are very popular because travelling long distances on them is tiring.

This sentence misuses 'takes people to travel a lot with them' and 'they are very exhausting'. 'Tiring' describes how people feel; 'exhausting' describes something that causes exhaustion but is less natural here. 'It takes people to travel a lot with them' is ungrammatical; use 'travelling long distances on them' or 'using them for long trips'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'travelling long distances on them is tiring' or 'using them for long trips is exhausting' and add comma after 'But other than that'.