Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct any missing or wrong words, avoid fillers, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences. For example, say what the bike looked like, who gave it to you, when you received it, and one effect it had on you. Use connectors like “and” or “which” to link ideas and remove hesitation like “uh.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with a training wheel that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I rode it almost every day around the neighborhood. This regular practice helped me gain confidence and made outdoor play more enjoyable.

제안: Be clearer and more coherent: give a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting details with clear reasons and avoid unclear phrases like “we can rights.” Use linking words (for example, “because,” “so,” “for”) and correct collocations (e.g., “young people,” “sports bikes,” “use them for exercise”). Limit to up to five sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among young people. Many prefer sports or racing bikes because they enjoy speed and use cycling as a form of exercise, and some also cycle to commute to work or school.

× Yes, I did have a big when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence is missing the noun 'bike' after 'big', causing a sentence structure error (missing word). Insert the missing noun to complete the meaning. Also keep the past tense 'did have' to match the past context. Grammar problem type ID:26

× It was small red bicycle with a training wheel that my parents bought me, uh, on my 7th birthday.

✓ It was a small red bicycle with a training wheel that my parents bought me on my seventh birthday.

The original lacks the article 'a' before 'small red bicycle' and uses numeral '7th' in an informal way; also contains filler 'uh' which is not grammatical. Add the indefinite article and spell out 'seventh' for smoother, grammatically correct speech. Adjective order 'small red' is acceptable. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I rode it almost every day around the neighborhood, which helped me gain confidence and enjoy outdoor play with my.

✓ I rode it almost every day around the neighborhood, which helped me gain confidence and enjoy outdoor play with my friends.

The sentence ends abruptly with a possessive pronoun 'my' without a noun, causing a sentence structure error. Add the noun 'friends' (or another appropriate noun) to complete the phrase 'with my friends.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among the young people and mostly males.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among young people and mostly males.

The phrase 'the young people' is awkward; 'young people' without 'the' is more natural. Otherwise the sentence is acceptable. This is an adjective/noun usage nuance rather than an article issue. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Most of them prefer racing or sports bike use because they enjoy speed and use them for exercise or we can rights.

✓ Most of them prefer racing or sports bikes because they enjoy speed and use them for exercise or commuting.

Multiple problems: 'racing or sports bike use' is ungrammatical; 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'most of them' and 'prefer' (subject-verb agreement), and 'use' is unnecessary. The phrase 'we can rights' is meaningless and likely intended to be 'weekends' or 'commuting'; context suggests 'commuting' fits better. Replace with 'or commuting' to make a logical, grammatical sentence. Also ensure noun plurality matches the plural subject. Grammar problem type ID:26