Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and personal, but reduce fillers (umm, uh) and tighten the structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/so/and). Keep it to a maximum of 4–5 sentences and add a small vivid detail to make it more engaging.

예시: Yes. My parents bought me a small red bicycle when I was about seven, and it quickly became my favourite. I often rode it around the neighborhood with two close friends, especially on weekends, because we loved racing each other down the hill. Those rides are one of my happiest childhood memories.

제안: Your main idea is clear but the answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so, therefore). Give one specific reason and one brief example or consequence. Avoid repeating words and correct sentence structure (e.g., 'convenient' → 'more convenient', 'efforts of fee' unclear).

예시: Not really. Motorbikes are much more common now because they are faster and more convenient for commuting in congested cities. For example, many people choose motorbikes to save time and avoid crowded buses, so bike use for daily travel has declined.

× Yes, umm, when I was a child, uh, my parents bought me a bike, which was my favorite vehicle at that time.

✓ Yes, umm, when I was a child, uh, my parents bought me a bike, which was my favorite vehicle at that time.

This sentence is already correct in past tense. The actions (parents bought, I was) appropriately use past tense, so no change is needed. Suggestion: keep past tense verbs for childhood memories.

× I remember I usually rode around my neighborhood with my friends, which was really fun.

✓ I remember I usually rode around my neighborhood with my friends, which was really fun.

The sentence mixes 'I remember' (present) with 'usually rode' (past), but this is acceptable: 'I remember' expresses a present recollection about habitual past action, so 'usually rode' is correct. No grammatical correction required. Suggestion: to emphasize memory, you can say 'I remember usually riding around my neighborhood with my friends, which was really fun.' This uses a gerund after 'remember' for a smoother style.

× I don't think so. Nowadays the motorbike is much more prevalent in my country.

✓ I don't think so. Nowadays motorbikes are much more prevalent in my country.

Subject-verb and number agreement: 'motorbike' as a general category should be plural 'motorbikes' when speaking about prevalence in the country. Use plural noun with plural verb 'are' for general statements. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to things in general.

× This is because of its convenient where people need when people just use it to drive around the city without they efforts of fee, without the physical effort.

✓ This is because they are convenient for people when they just use them to get around the city without paying fees or using physical effort.

Multiple pronoun and noun number errors and awkward phrasing: 'its convenient' uses singular possessive 'its' with an abstract adjective; correct is 'they are convenient' agreeing with plural 'motorbikes'. 'where people need' is ungrammatical; better is 'for people'. 'it' should be 'them' to refer to motorbikes (plural). 'without they efforts of fee' misuses pronoun and word order; correct is 'without paying fees' or 'without the effort' and 'without the physical effort' is redundant. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match the noun number, use 'pay' as verb for fees, and simplify: 'they are convenient for people who just use them to get around the city without paying fees or expending physical effort.'