Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bicycle as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (umm, uh) and repetition. Use correct tense and articles (a/an, the) and plural/singular forms. Link ideas with simple connectors like “because” or “so” to improve coherence.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child. Because most families in my area were middle class and money was tight, my parents could only afford a tricycle. I used that tricycle until I was seven, and I clearly remember wanting a proper bicycle but it wasn’t possible at the time.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons and a short example. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then expand with one or two concrete details. Correct grammar (use ‘bicycles’ plural, ‘in my country’, avoid mixing tenses). Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘however’ to show contrast if needed.

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country because many families are middle class and cannot afford them. Instead, tricycles are more common in some neighborhoods, for example children often ride tricycles to nearby shops or parks because they are cheaper and safer.

× No, I didn't have bicycle when I was child umm, because most families in my areas were middle class and couldn't afford uh, bike cycle.

✓ No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child, umm, because most families in my area were middle class and couldn't afford a bicycle.

Errors: missing indefinite article before singular countable noun ('a bicycle'), missing article and determiner before 'child' ('a child' or 'when I was a child'), incorrect plural 'areas' should be singular 'area' for the speaker's locality, and redundant 'bike cycle' phrase. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns, use 'a child' for the phrase 'when I was a child', and use 'area' to refer to your locality or 'areas' if you mean multiple regions. Remove redundant words.

× Umm, that's why I have. I had uh, tricycle till I was 7.

✓ Umm, that's why I had a tricycle until I was seven.

Errors: contradictory tense 'that's why I have. I had' mixes present and past; use past 'had' to match 'when I was seven'. Missing article 'a' before 'tricycle' and informal 'till' should be 'until' in formal speech. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent for childhood events and include the indefinite article before singular countable nouns.

× I remember how I was wanting a bicycle but it was not possible that time.

✓ I remember how I wanted a bicycle, but it was not possible at that time.

Errors: 'was wanting' is unnatural for past states — simple past 'wanted' is correct. 'That time' should be 'at that time' for correct preposition. Suggestion: Use simple past for past desires and include appropriate prepositions ('at that time').

× I don't think their bikes are popular in my country because most families are middle class.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because most families are middle class.

Error: 'their' is an incorrect possessive pronoun here; it implies ownership by a previously mentioned group. Omit 'their' when speaking generally about bikes in the country. Suggestion: For general statements, use the noun without a possessive pronoun or use 'people's' if referring to people's bikes.

× They couldn't afford bicycle so but they can afford tricycles.

✓ They couldn't afford a bicycle, but they could afford tricycles.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'bicycle' (singular countable). Mixed tenses: 'couldn't afford' (past) should match 'could afford' (past) when speaking generally about past situations; use 'but' without 'so'. Suggestion: Use 'a' for singular countable nouns and keep verb tense consistent; use 'but' to contrast.