Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense, and organize your reply with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (umm) and correct grammar (use past tense for past events). Use a linking phrase to add the detail about your dad.

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It wasn’t new; it was my father’s old bike, which he had used when he was young, and he gave it to me. I remember learning to ride it in our neighborhood park.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then add two specific, logical reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating words and remove fillers. Provide a short comparative statement with correct structure.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are affordable for many people, and secondly they are practical for short trips in crowded cities. As a result, more households own bikes than cars.

× Umm yes, I do have a bike when I was young, but it wasn't a new bike, it was a bike that my dad used to have when he was a child so I get it after him.

✓ Umm yes, I had a bike when I was young, but it wasn't new; it was a bike that my dad used when he was a child, so I got it from him.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do have', 'get') with past context ('when I was young', 'when he was a child'). Use past tense consistently for past situations: 'had' for possession in the past, 'used' for habitual past, and 'got' for receiving. Also adjust preposition 'from' instead of 'after'. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× Uh, yes, bikes are really popular in our country because everyone, including teens above the age of 18, umm and old people, everyone owns a bike.

✓ Uh, yes, bikes are really popular in our country because everyone owns a bike, including teens over 18 and older people.

Original sentence is repetitive and awkwardly structured ('everyone' repeated, 'umm and old people'). Remove redundancy and place the inclusive phrase after the main clause. Use 'over 18' instead of 'above the age of 18' for conciseness and 'older people' rather than 'old people' for natural phrasing.

× I think more than cars, bikes are more common in our.

✓ I think bikes are more common than cars in our country.

Word order is incorrect and the sentence is incomplete ('in our.'). The comparative structure should be 'bikes are more common than cars' and include the object 'in our country' to complete the thought.