Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar mistakes, avoid repetition, and add one or two supporting details linked logically. For example, explain when you received the bike and why you couldn’t ride it. Use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was eight, but I couldn’t ride it at first because I was afraid of falling. After a few months of practice with my father’s help, I learned to ride confidently.

제안: Answer directly, use correct article usage and avoid filler sounds. Provide a specific reason or example and connect ideas with linking words (e.g., "for example", "because"). Mention why long-distance cycling shows popularity and state your personal intention clearly.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in Japan because many people use them for daily commuting and leisure. For example, some cyclists even travel long distances from Hokkaido to Okinawa, which shows a strong cycling culture, and I would like to try such a trip myself someday.

× When I was charged my parents bought me a bike.

✓ When I was a child my parents bought me a bike.

The student likely intended to say 'child' but wrote 'charged', which is a wrong word rather than a tense error; however it makes the past-tense context unclear. Replace 'charged' with 'a child' to correctly express the time during which parents bought the bike. Also keep the past tense 'bought' to match the time frame. Suggestion: say 'When I was a child' to indicate the period in the past.

× However I I was I was not able to bike.

✓ However, I was not able to ride a bike.

The original sentence contains repetitions ('I I was I was') and an incorrect verb choice 'bike' used as a verb in this context. Use 'ride a bike' to express the action. Also include a comma after 'However' for clarity and remove the duplicated words. Suggestion: 'However, I was not able to ride a bike.'

× Yes, I think bike is popular in Japan.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in Japan.

'Bike' is singular and lacks an article, but the student means the general category. Use the plural noun 'bikes' or the definite article with the singular ('the bike') to talk generally. Also use 'are' to agree with the plural subject. Suggestion: 'bikes are popular'.

× Uh, there are people who ride the bike from Hokkaido to Okinawa, so I, I want to do so.

✓ Uh, there are people who ride bikes from Hokkaido to Okinawa, so I want to do that.

'The bike' specifies a particular bike, but the speaker refers generally to long-distance riders, so plural 'bikes' is appropriate. Also 'do so' is formal/awkward in speech; 'do that' or 'do it' is more natural. Remove the doubled 'I,'. Suggestion: 'ride bikes... so I want to do that.'