Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on natural phrasing and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood to get to school and visit friends, and I especially enjoyed early morning rides because the streets were quiet and the sunrise looked beautiful.

제안: Use clear reasons with correct grammar and coherent linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific, well-phrased reasons (e.g., availability and convenient rental systems). Avoid unclear phrases and word repetition.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many cities have public bike-sharing schemes, and you can easily rent a bike with a bank card or an app, which makes cycling a convenient option for short trips.

× Yes, I have a bike in my child and I like to ride a bike along the city to enjoy the softy breathtaking scenery and enjoy the soft wind and enjoy the sunrise streaming on my face.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I liked to ride it around the city to enjoy the soft, breathtaking scenery, the gentle wind, and the sunrise on my face.

The question asks about the past (Did you have...), so the student should use past tense verbs (had, liked) rather than present tense (have, like). Also 'in my child' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child'. Use pronoun 'it' to refer to the bike. Combine similar items with commas and use appropriate adjectives ('gentle wind'). Suggestions: match the tense to the question (use past), use correct time phrase 'when I was a child', replace repeated 'enjoy' with a concise list, and use pronouns for clarity.

× Yes, I think bike is popular in our country because bike is everywhere too landed and we can see you bike along the world and we can use our credit card to lend the bike to borrow the bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because bikes are everywhere, and we can see them throughout the city; we can use our credit card to borrow a bike.

The student uses singular 'bike' where plural 'bikes' is needed to speak generally. Use 'are' to agree with plural subject (bikes are). 'You bike' is incorrect; use 'them' to refer to bikes, and 'along the world' should be 'throughout the city' or 'around the world' depending on meaning. 'Lend the bike to borrow the bike' is confused: people borrow bikes and companies lend them, so 'use our credit card to borrow a bike' is clearer. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, ensure subject-verb agreement (bikes are), use correct pronouns (them), and choose the correct verbs (borrow vs lend).