Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, conciseness and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like "unique feature to escape from the world of imagination" and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (for example, "and" or "because") correctly and keep answer length under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it with my family and friends around our neighborhood, which helped me feel free and active. Because I practiced regularly, I became quite confident riding on busy streets.

제안: Focus on producing a clear, grammatical response that directly answers the question. Begin with a direct opinion ("Yes" or "No"), then give specific reasons and examples. Organize ideas with linking words such as "because," "for example," or "however." Avoid fragments and unclear references. Limit to up to five sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use motorbikes, electric bikes and traditional bicycles because they are affordable and convenient in traffic. For example, students and delivery workers often prefer motorbikes to save time and money.

× Yes, I used to have a bicycle when I was a child, because I was fond of riding a bicycle with my family members or my friends, which gave me a unique feature to escape from the world of imagination.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bicycle when I was a child because I enjoyed riding it with my family and my friends, which gave me a unique way to escape into a world of imagination.

The original sentence mixes correct past-tense 'used to have' with awkward phrasing and an incorrect collocation 'gave me a unique feature.' Replace 'was fond of riding a bicycle' with 'enjoyed riding it' for natural past-tense expression. 'Family members or my friends' is redundant; use 'family and my friends.' 'Escape from the world of imagination' should be 'escape into a world of imagination.' These changes keep past tense consistent and improve word choice and idiomatic usage.

× Moreover, riding a bicycle.

✓ Moreover, I often rode my bicycle for recreation and to explore my neighborhood.

The original fragment 'Moreover, riding a bicycle.' is a sentence without a finite verb and therefore incomplete. Provide a full clause with a past-tense verb to match the context, e.g., 'I often rode my bicycle,' and add purpose or detail to complete the thought.

× Definitely as I come from an II has a many bikes via motorbikes, E bikes, bicycles and many more.

✓ Definitely. In my country there are many types of bikes, such as motorbikes, e-bikes, and bicycles.

The original is ungrammatical and contains fragments and unclear phrases ('II has a many bikes via'). Fix sentence structure by making a clear declarative sentence: 'In my country there are many types of bikes.' Use 'e-bikes' lowercase and a parallel list 'motorbikes, e-bikes, and bicycles.' This corrects word order and article use.

× Different transports are very common and popular mode of communication or commuting where there are use by young people and.

✓ Different modes of transport are very common and popular for commuting and are used by young people and others.

The original has incorrect nouns and prepositions: 'Different transports' should be 'Different modes of transport.' 'Mode of communication or commuting' is confused; use 'for commuting.' 'Where there are use by' is ungrammatical; use 'are used by.' Complete the sentence by adding 'and others' or specifying who else uses them. These changes correct noun choice, preposition usage, and verb form.