Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体能传达意思，但句子结构与用词不够自然，有语法错误与冗长表达。应直接开门见山给出主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，注意时态和固定搭配（ride a bike, in the park, feel the wind），并删去多余词语，保持不超过5句。可以改用更地道的表达如“I used to ride my bike in the park and loved feeling the wind on my face.”

예시: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike in the park near my home and I loved feeling the wind on my face. I often went there after school and sometimes rode with my friends, which made those afternoons really enjoyable.

제안: 回答含混且语法和逻辑有问题（“no matter the time in 20 years ago”不通顺）。应直接给出观点主题句，然后用具体理由或对比支持（例如过去与现在的对比、原因、例子）。避免犹豫语（umm），用连接词（for example, nowadays, compared to）使表达更连贯。将句子控制在2–4句内。

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Compared to 20 years ago, many more people now use bikes for short trips because they are cheap and convenient. For example, in my neighborhood you can see bikes parked outside every shop and many people cycle to work or school.

× Yes I did, and I really enjoyed the time that I rode my bike along the park to enjoy the wind browsing me.

✓ Yes, I did, and I really enjoyed the times when I rode my bike through the park to enjoy the wind brushing past me.

问题类型：动词 + -ing 及动词词形与固定搭配使用不当。说明：原句中“browsing me”用法错误，browse 通常表示（动物）吃草或随意翻阅，不适用于“风吹过”的表达；且“along the park”搭配不自然，常用介词是“through”或“along”后接“the road/route”。另外“the time that I rode”更自然的表达是“the times when I rode”或“the time I spent riding”。建议：用“wind brushing past me”或“the wind brushing against me”来表达“风吹过我”的意思；用“through the park”来表示“穿过公园”；注意动词的正确形式和固定搭配。

× I do think so, umm, no matter the time in 20 years ago, but right now our country has many bikes in our street.

✓ I do think so. Twenty years ago there were many bikes, and right now there are many bikes on our streets.

问题类型：句子结构错误（时态与时间状语搭配不当，there be 表达和介词使用错误）。说明：原句中“no matter the time in 20 years ago”结构混乱，不能这样表达过去时间；应使用明确的过去时间状语如“Twenty years ago”。另外，表示存在时常用“there were/there are”结构，而“in our street”应为复数或泛指用“on our streets”。建议：把句子拆成两部分明确对比时态：过去用“Twenty years ago there were...”，现在用“right now there are...”；使用正确的介词“on”搭配“street/streets”。