Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid filler words like “maybe” and minor inaccuracies (say “two‑wheel” instead of “2 wheel”).

예시: Yes, I did. I got a two‑wheel bicycle when I was eight, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood. For example, I would ride to the park every afternoon with my friends, which helped me build confidence and stay active.

제안: Good idea expressed, but remove hesitations and make the comparison more specific. Use a linking word (e.g., “however” or “because”) and provide one concrete reason or example of how weather or infrastructure affects popularity.

예시: Not really. In Malaysia bikes are less popular because the hot, humid climate makes long rides uncomfortable. Moreover, there are few dedicated bike lanes in many cities, so people prefer motorbikes or cars for daily travel.

× Yes I did. It was a 2 wheel bicycle that I got maybe when I was 8 years old and I loved to ride the bike in our neighborhood.

✓ Yes, I did. It was a two-wheel bicycle that I got when I was about eight years old, and I loved riding the bike in our neighborhood.

Errors: punctuation and number formatting are style issues but relevant grammar issues: '2 wheel' should be hyphenated as 'two-wheel' when used as a compound adjective (adjective formation). 'maybe when I was 8 years old' mixes informal 'maybe' and numeral; use 'about eight years old' for natural past-time expression. 'I loved to ride the bike' is acceptable, but 'I loved riding the bike' is more natural when describing a habitual past activity. Suggestion: use 'two-wheel' as a compound adjective, spell out small numbers in prose, replace 'maybe' with 'about' for approximate past time, and use the -ing form to describe habitual past actions.

× Uh, I'm currently living in Malaysia and in Malaysia bikes are not really popular because the weather outside is very hot and humid.

✓ Uh, I currently live in Malaysia, and in Malaysia bikes are not very popular because the weather is very hot and humid.

Errors: 'I'm currently living' is present continuous that can be used, but for states or permanent residence 'I currently live' (simple present) is more appropriate. 'not really popular' is conversational; use 'not very popular' for clearer meaning. Also 'the weather outside is very hot and humid' is wordy; 'the weather is very hot and humid' is sufficient. Suggestion: use simple present for general states and simplify redundancies.

× It's not so comfortable to ride a bike compared to European countries for example.

✓ It's less comfortable to ride a bike compared to in European countries, for example.

Errors: The sentence compares 'riding a bike' in Malaysia to 'European countries' but lacks a parallel structure. Use 'less comfortable' to form a correct comparative and include a parallel prepositional phrase 'compared to in European countries' or better 'than in European countries.' Also place 'for example' with a comma. Suggestion: use 'less comfortable' for comparison and keep the comparison objects parallel: 'less comfortable ... than in European countries.'