Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid hesitation fillers and tighten tenses. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct verb forms and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I did. My older brother owned the bike because my parents couldn’t afford one for each child, so I often borrowed his. As a result, I spent many afternoons riding around the neighborhood and exploring nearby parks.

제안: Give a direct opinion sentence then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "inaccessible," "costly") and avoid generic statements. Add a brief example or consequence for clarity.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because public transport is often inaccessible and relatively costly. Consequently, many people choose bicycles to save money and reduce fuel consumption, especially for short trips in towns and suburbs.

× I had a bike when I was a child, although it was owned by my older brother because my father cannot, uh, afford to buy bikes for all of us.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, although it was owned by my older brother because my father could not afford to buy bikes for all of us.

The sentence mixes past context with a present-tense modal 'cannot'. In a past narrative, modal verbs should be in the past form ('could not' instead of 'cannot') to show ability or possibility in the past. Suggestion: keep all verbs that refer to past events in past tense (could not, borrowed, enjoyed).

× I usually borrowed it and I enjoy roaming around.

✓ I usually borrowed it and I enjoyed roaming around.

The sentence combines past action 'borrowed' with present-tense verb 'enjoy'. Use the past participle or past simple form 'enjoyed' to maintain consistent past tense. Suggestion: match tense of coordinated verbs when they refer to the same time period.

× Bikes are usually popular in my country because the public transport is not accessible and it's more expensive.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country because public transport is not accessible and is more expensive.

Use of 'usually' is unnecessary and weakens the statement; also 'the public transport' is unidiomatic—'public transport' without article is preferred. The clause 'it's more expensive' is vague; use 'is more expensive' to refer to public transport. Suggestion: remove unnecessary adverbs and use correct article usage for uncountable nouns like 'public transport'.

× We can reduce the use of fuel and conserve energy if we ride the bike.

✓ We can reduce fuel use and conserve energy if we ride bikes.

'Reduce the use of fuel' is wordy; 'reduce fuel use' is more natural. Also, match number: in general statements about people, use plural 'bikes' rather than 'the bike'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general habits and concise noun phrases.