School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise: give a direct, grammatical location sentence, avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Include one or two specific details (distance, direction, or notable landmark) linked logically. Keep answer under five sentences.

예시: My primary school was about a five-minute walk from my home in the centre of UMM Province. My high school was farther away, located to the west of the same province, so I had to take a bus to get there.

제안: Eliminate repetition and improve grammar: use a clear topic sentence then add one specific reason with a linking word (e.g., because, so). Keep it natural and concise.

예시: Yes, I really liked my school because the teachers and my classmates were very encouraging. As a result, the supportive atmosphere made learning enjoyable and helped me stay motivated.

제안: Correct grammar and add specific details: state your opinion, then give concrete examples of why (teacher support, facilities). Use linking words like 'also' or 'moreover' correctly and avoid filler words like 'umm'.

예시: Yes, I think it is a great place to study because the teachers are very supportive and always ready to help students. Moreover, the classrooms are well-equipped with modern projectors and computers, which makes lessons more effective.

제안: Make the description coherent: start with a clear topic sentence about the environment, then add specific features (teacher support, study groups, quiet library) with linking words. Remove hesitations and correct singular/plural errors.

예시: The environment at my school was supportive and academically focused. Teachers were always willing to help, and there were quiet study areas and group sessions that motivated students to learn.

제안: Use precise grammar and clearer examples: give a short direct opinion, then explain with reasons and an example. Replace vague phrases like 'studies are curious' with 'students are curious'.

예시: I think interest in studying is extremely important because it drives motivation and helps sustain long-term learning. For example, when students are curious about a topic, they spend more time researching difficult concepts and therefore gain a deeper understanding and better grades.

× My primary school was about 5th minute from my home in the center of UMM Province not console and province.

✓ My primary school was about five minutes from my home in the center of UMM Province.

The original sentence has incorrect phrase order and wrong forms: '5th minute' should be 'five minutes' (plural and cardinal number), and extraneous fragments 'not console and province' are unclear and should be removed. Use 'about five minutes from my home' for distance and place modifiers after the noun phrase. Suggestion: Use cardinal numbers for time/distance and plural form for minutes; remove unrelated fragments.

× My high school it further away while further away in the West.

✓ My high school is further away to the west.

The original repeats 'further away' and includes an unnecessary pronoun 'it'. Correct structure: subject + verb + complement. Use 'to the west' or 'in the west' but avoid duplication. Suggestion: say 'My high school is further away to the west.'

× In the West of the same province is is what in a rush earlier and.

✓ In the west of the same province, it is busier and more crowded.

This sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It repeats 'is' and contains fragments like 'what in a rush earlier and.' I inferred the intended meaning (busier/more crowded). Correct sentences need subject, verb, and clear complements. Suggestion: rephrase to a clear description such as 'it is busier and more crowded.'

× Yeah, I really like my school because my teacher and my friends always encourage me on the academic subject and more.

✓ Yeah, I really like my school because my teachers and my friends always encourage me in academic subjects and more.

Use plural 'teachers' and 'academic subjects' to match general meaning and ensure agreement. Also use preposition 'in' with 'encourage me in' or 'encourage me with'. 'On the academic subject and more' is awkward; 'in academic subjects and beyond' or 'and more' can follow. Suggestion: pluralize and use 'in' with 'encourage'.

× I think the atmosphere at at that place is very supportive and make learning enjoyable.

✓ I think the atmosphere at that place is very supportive and makes learning enjoyable.

There is a duplicated 'at' and subject-verb agreement error: 'atmosphere ... makes' (singular subject needs 'makes'). Also 'make' should be 'makes'. Suggestion: remove duplicate preposition and use correct verb form 'makes'.

× Yes, I think my school is great place to study.

✓ Yes, I think my school is a great place to study.

The indefinite article 'a' is required before the singular count noun phrase 'great place'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles: 'a great place'.

× The teachers are very nice and supportive and they are always willing to help that student.

✓ The teachers are very nice and supportive and they are always willing to help their students.

Pronoun 'that student' is incorrect in context; use 'their students' to refer back to 'teachers' (plural). Suggestion: match pronoun number and use possessive pronoun correctly.

× Moreover, the classroom umm provide well equipment and such as modern projectors and.

✓ Moreover, the classrooms provide good equipment, such as modern projectors.

Errors: 'classroom' should be plural 'classrooms' to match general statement, 'provide' needs correct subject-verb agreement if singular, 'well equipment' is incorrect — use 'good equipment', and 'such as' should be followed by examples without trailing 'and'. Suggestion: pluralize, choose correct adjective 'good', and complete the list properly.

× While the environment at my school is very supportive and academically focused, teachers are always willing to help their students and student UMM motivate to learn, which can create positive atmospheres and more writing UMM.

✓ The environment at my school is very supportive and academically focused; teachers are always willing to help their students and motivate them to learn, which creates a positive atmosphere.

The original mixes clauses awkwardly and contains fragments 'student UMM' and 'more writing UMM'. Fix by removing 'while' at start or completing the clause, ensure verbs match subjects ('motivate them') and use singular 'atmosphere' for general state. Suggestion: restructure into a clear compound sentence and remove filler sounds.

× Well, I think interest in study is extremely important to learn because it drives motivation and sustain long term learning and engagement.

✓ Well, I think interest in studying is extremely important because it drives motivation and sustains long-term learning and engagement.

Use gerund 'studying' after 'interest in'. 'Sustain' should be 'sustains' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also add hyphen in 'long-term' as adjective. Suggestion: use 'interest in studying' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× When studies are curious, they proceed through through difficult topic and develop a deeper understanding which usually leads to better results.

✓ When students are curious, they persevere through difficult topics and develop a deeper understanding, which usually leads to better results.

'When studies are curious' is wrong; use 'students'. 'Proceed through through' is a repetition; better verb is 'persevere through'. 'Difficult topic' should be plural 'difficult topics'. Add comma before 'which'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'students', avoid repeated words, and pluralize 'topics'.