Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (types of clothing and reasons). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer clothes that are comfortable and allow free movement because I value modesty and practicality. For example, I often choose loose dresses or long-sleeved tops made of breathable fabrics so I can stay comfortable all day.

제안: Avoid unclear phrasing and repetition. Give a direct answer (comfortable and smart) then explain with a clear example. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example" and correct singular/plural forms.

예시: I prefer comfortable yet smart clothes because they let me move easily while still looking presentable. For example, I often wear a smart overall dress with a neat blouse instead of tight crop tops.

제안: Be consistent and concise. Give a short reason why you like T-shirts and mention any change in preference with a linking phrase like "however" or "nowadays." Avoid small grammatical errors (articles and plural forms).

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and can look smart when paired with trousers. I used to avoid them, but nowadays I wear T-shirts more often because they suit my style better.

제안: Reduce repetition and give one clear reason and one specific detail. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect cause and effect. Replace vague phrases with precise ones (e.g., "I try on many outfits").

예시: Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I enjoy trying different styles. For instance, I often try on several outfits before I decide which one feels right for the day.

제안: Good structure and relevant details. Improve by tightening language and correcting minor phrasing (e.g., "volunteer at head centers" unclear). Use a concise contrast phrase like "whereas" or "while".

예시: Yes. On weekdays I wear formal clothes like shirts and trousers because I volunteer at a local center and need to look professional, whereas on weekends I wear casual dresses to relax.

제안: Be precise with vocabulary (use "bright" and "attention-grabbing"). Give one or two specific colours you prefer and explain why. Use a linking word like "because" to explain your preference.

예시: I prefer neutral colours because bright clothes feel too attention-grabbing for me. For example, I usually choose beige, navy or soft pastels since they look understated and versatile.

× I would say I love to wear clothes that I am most comfortable in and I can move freely in them.

✓ I would say I love to wear clothes that I am most comfortable in and that allow me to move freely.

The original repeats prepositions and mixes structures ('I can move freely in them') creating awkward phrasing. Use 'that allow me to move freely' to use a relative clause with a verb (allow) and an infinitive, which is more natural and avoids repeating 'in'.

× I love clothes that covers my body however I want to feel comfortable in them.

✓ I love clothes that cover my body; however, I want to feel comfortable in them.

'Clothes' is plural, so the relative verb must be 'cover' not 'covers'. Also add punctuation and 'however' needs commas or a semicolon to join two independent clauses.

× I prefer to wear comfortable and smart clothes rather than wearing tight clothes since I love to.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and smart clothes rather than tight clothes, because I like them.

The phrase 'rather than wearing tight clothes since I love to' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use parallel structure: 'rather than tight clothes'. 'Since I love to' is vague; replace with 'because I like them' for clarity.

× Like I said earlier, I love to feel comfortable, move freely and be cautious of how I look.

✓ Like I said earlier, I love to feel comfortable, move freely, and be mindful of how I look.

'Be cautious of how I look' is acceptable but 'be mindful of' is more natural. Also add Oxford comma for clarity in a list of verbs.

× Example is wearing an overall gown instead of a tight crop top and a tight.

✓ For example, I would wear an overall dress instead of a tight crop top.

The original is fragmented and repeats 'tight' without completing the phrase. Use 'For example' and correct noun 'overall dress' (or 'jumpsuit' if intended) and remove the dangling 'and a tight'.

× They look official and make me look smart.

✓ They look smart and make me appear more put-together.

'Look official' is odd for T-shirts; 'look smart' is fine but repeating 'look' is stylistically weak. Suggest alternative phrasing 'appear more put-together' to improve naturalness. Tense (present) is fine.

× I used to feel uncomfortable in them.

✓ I used to feel uncomfortable in them.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately uses past habitual 'used to'. No change needed.

× However right now I would love to put on T-shirt more.

✓ However, right now I would love to wear T-shirts more often.

Use 'wear' instead of 'put on' for habitual preference, plural 'T-shirts', and add 'more often' for clarity. Also add comma after 'However'.

× They are much more comfortable for me than crop tops.

✓ They are much more comfortable for me than crop tops are.

Comparative clauses with 'than' can include the verb for clarity: 'than crop tops are.' The original is understandable but adding 'are' improves grammatical completeness.

× I do spend a lot of time choosing what to wear.

✓ I do spend a lot of time choosing what to wear.

This sentence is grammatical and emphasizes the action; no change needed.

× I love to play, play dress up a lot.

✓ I love to play dress-up a lot.

Reduce repetition and hyphenate 'dress-up' when used as a noun. The original repeats 'play' unnecessarily.

× So that brings me to having difficulty in deciding what to wear.

✓ That often makes it difficult for me to decide what to wear.

Recast to a more natural English structure: 'having difficulty in deciding' is wordy; use 'difficult for me to decide'.

× So I try on a huge lot, a whole lot of dresses before I decide on what to wear.

✓ So I try on a whole lot of dresses before I decide what to wear.

Remove redundant 'huge lot, a whole lot' and 'decide on what to wear' should be 'decide what to wear' for natural phrasing.

× I do wear different kind of clothes on weekdays and weekends.

✓ I do wear different kinds of clothes on weekdays and weekends.

Use plural 'kinds' and plural noun agreement: 'different kinds of clothes' is correct.

× On weekdays I wear official clothes such as shirts and trousers because I do volunteer at head centers so I have to look official.

✓ On weekdays I wear formal clothes such as shirts and trousers because I volunteer at head centers, so I have to look professional.

Use 'formal' or 'professional' rather than 'official' for clothes. 'Do volunteer' is unnecessary; use 'volunteer'. Add comma before 'so' and change 'look official' to 'look professional' for naturalness.

× However, during weekends I just put on casual dresses.

✓ However, on weekends I just wear casual clothes.

Use 'on weekends' not 'during weekends'. 'Put on' is less natural for habitual clothing choices; 'wear casual clothes' is better. 'Dresses' may be too specific unless intended.

× I do not like a lot of colored clothes because colored clothes are usually too bright and attention calling.

✓ I do not like very colorful clothes because they are usually too bright and attention-grabbing.

Use 'very colorful clothes' rather than 'a lot of colored clothes'. 'Attention calling' is incorrect — use 'attention-grabbing'. Also use pronoun 'they' to avoid repetition.

× So I prefer nude colored clothes rather than brighter colored clothes.

✓ So I prefer nude-colored clothes rather than brighter colors.

Hyphenate 'nude-colored'. Better to contrast 'nude-colored clothes' with 'brighter colors' or 'brighter-colored clothes'. Avoid repeating 'colored'.