Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh) and repetition, and give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Keep to under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

예시: I prefer casual clothes because they are comfortable and made from breathable fabrics. For example, I often wear denim jeans and plain T-shirts because they are easy to move in and suit most of my daily activities.

제안: Answer directly then give one clear condition and example. Remove hesitations and finish the sentence. Use a linking phrase to show contrast between occasions.

예시: It depends on the occasion. If I'm meeting friends or going for a walk, I prefer comfortable casual clothes; however, for work or formal events I choose smart outfits like a shirt and trousers.

제안: Good direct answer and reason — tighten it by removing fillers and combining short fragments into one or two clear sentences. Add a linking word if you want to expand.

예시: Yes, I do. I mostly wear plain T-shirts made from breathable fabric because they keep me cool and allow me to move easily.

제안: Be concise and confident. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason or example. Avoid repeating phrases and fillers.

예시: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes. I usually pick something that fits and is comfortable, so shopping decisions are quick.

제안: Clear contrast between weekday and weekend is good. Improve fluency by removing fillers, using a linking word to contrast, and using precise phrases (e.g. “skirts and blouses” or “pants and shirts”). Limit to two sentences.

예시: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear formal clothes such as skirts and blouses or trousers and shirts for work, whereas at the weekend I prefer casual outfits like T-shirts and jeans when I hang out with friends.

제안: Answer directly then expand with one brief reason or example. Use complete sentences and avoid short fragmented replies.

예시: I mostly prefer black clothes because they are easy to match and look neat. For example, I often wear a black T-shirt or a black jacket because they go with many outfits.

× I would say casual clothes, umm, I prefer casual clothes because uh those are very comfortable and breathable material.

✓ I would say casual clothes. Umm, I prefer casual clothes because they are made of very comfortable and breathable material.

The original mixes countable plural noun 'clothes' with singular noun phrase 'material' incorrectly and uses 'those are' with 'material'. Use a pronoun 'they' to refer to 'clothes' and a passive construction 'are made of' to link clothes with 'material'. Also add 'made of' for natural collocation: 'made of breathable material'.

× Umm casual vyasa means like for an example, denim and T-shirt like uh, fight like pant denim and.

✓ Umm, casual wear means, for example, denim and T-shirts, like jeans and pants.

The original is ungrammatical and contains nonstandard words ('vyasa', 'fight') and incorrect word order. Use 'casual wear' as the noun, 'for example' for listing, pluralize 'T-shirts' to match 'denim', and use standard terms 'jeans' and 'pants'.

× I would say that depends.

✓ I would say it depends.

Use the pronoun 'it' as the dummy subject with 'depends' to form the correct present tense expression 'it depends'. The original 'that depends' is not idiomatic here.

× That depends on the occasion or place where I'm going.

✓ That depends on the occasion or the place I am going to.

Word order and preposition placement are improved by placing 'I am going to' at the end and adding 'the' before 'place' for clarity. Also use 'depends on' followed by noun phrase.

× Uh, for an example, if I'm going to chill out with my friends, uh, like I'm going for a, just a walk or something.

✓ For example, if I'm going to chill out with my friends, like going for just a walk or something.

Use 'for example' (not 'for an example'), remove extra articles 'a' before 'just a walk' is acceptable but word order 'going for just a walk' sounds natural. Also reduce filler words.

× Uh, I prefer to wear.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes.

The original sentence lacks an object after 'wear', making it incomplete. Add the object 'casual clothes' to complete the meaning.

× Yes, I do. Umm, T-shirts. Mostly plain T-shirts, uh, which are made from, uh, breathable material, uh, because that will help me to move very easily.

✓ Yes, I do. Mostly plain T-shirts, which are made from breathable material, because they help me move easily.

Remove unnecessary fillers. Use 'which are made from breathable material' and replace 'that will help me to move very easily' with 'they help me move easily' for concise present-tense general statement and correct pronoun reference.

× Uh, how to answer that question? MMM, no, really not.

✓ Hmm, how should I answer that question? No, not really.

The original 'how to answer that question?' is an infinitive fragment. Use modal 'should' to form a question: 'How should I answer that question?' 'No, not really' is a natural response.

× I just go and pick up a cloth and mostly that clothes, uh, fits on me.

✓ I just go and pick up clothes, and mostly those clothes fit me.

'Cloth' is incorrect; use 'clothes' plural. Use 'those clothes fit me' for subject-verb agreement (plural 'clothes' with 'fit'). Remove extraneous 'on' after 'fit'.

× So I don't spend much time on clothes, on choosing clothes.

✓ So I don't spend much time choosing clothes.

Avoid redundant preposition 'on' and repetitive phrase. Use the gerund 'choosing' as the object of 'spend time'.

× Yes, uh, during weekdays, uh, when I go to work, I wear formal dress like skirt and blouse or pant and shirt like, but umm, during the weekend when I go out with my friends, when I chill out with my friends, I wear uh, casual dresses like T-shirt, denim or pant.

✓ Yes. During weekdays, when I go to work, I wear formal clothes like a skirt and blouse or pants and a shirt. But during the weekend, when I go out with my friends, I wear casual clothes like T-shirts, denim, or pants.

Use 'clothes' rather than 'dress' when listing items. Include articles 'a' before countable singulars (a skirt, a shirt). Use plural forms 'T-shirts' and 'pants/denim'. Remove repetition 'when I chill out with my friends' and streamline the sentence.

× Black. Mostly I choose black colour dresses.

✓ Black. Mostly I choose black-colored clothes.

Use 'black-colored' or simply 'black' as adjective and 'clothes' instead of 'dresses' to match general clothing. 'Colour' is a noun; 'black-coloured clothes' or 'black clothes' is idiomatic.