Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations, give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make your answer coherent. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repeating filler words like "umm".

예시: I prefer wearing jeans because they are comfortable and fashionable. For example, my friends often recommend brands that fit well, so I can look stylish without sacrificing comfort. Because they match many tops, I find jeans are a practical choice for everyday wear.

제안: Answer directly with present preference and give clear reasons. Avoid tense errors and reduce repetition. Provide one concrete example of what you consider "smart clothes" and when you wear them. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

예시: I prefer wearing smart clothes because they make me feel more confident and presentable. For example, I usually wear a blazer and chinos for presentations at university because they help me look professional and attract positive attention.

제안: This is reasonably clear but too short and full of hesitations. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail or example about when or why you choose T-shirts. Keep it fluent and avoid fillers.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and breathable in hot weather. For example, I often wear lightweight cotton T-shirts when I walk to campus or meet friends on warm days.

제안: Give a clear, structured answer: say how often and why, and describe one concrete situation (e.g. shopping with choices). Remove fillers and finish your thought. Use linking words like "especially" and "so."

예시: Yes, I often spend a long time choosing clothes because I want to find the best fit and style. For example, when shopping in a store with many options, I try on several items and compare them before deciding, so the process can take an hour or more.

제안: Good direct answer but reduce hesitations and make it more concise. Provide a brief reason and one specific example of an outfit you wear both during the week and on weekends. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

예시: No, I don't dress differently on weekdays and weekends because I choose versatile clothes. For example, I often wear a casual jacket and jeans to university and also when I meet friends on the weekend because the outfit is comfortable and looks good in both settings.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about general preferences, then give a specific reason for choosing black and an example of an item you wear in black. Avoid repeating "cool" and remove fillers.

예시: I don't have a strict color preference overall, but I often choose black clothing because it looks sleek and matches everything. For example, I usually wear a black jacket and jeans because they look stylish and are easy to pair with different shirts.

× Umm, I like wearing jeans because umm, I believe it is very umm, fashionable and umm, some of my peers umm, also wear jeans a lot and they would recommend umm, many umm, cool jeans to me.

✓ Umm, I like wearing jeans because I believe they are very fashionable and some of my peers also wear jeans a lot and recommend many cool styles to me.

The original sentence inconsistently uses singular 'it' to refer to 'jeans' (plural) and has redundant words. Replace 'it is' with 'they are' to match plural 'jeans' (subject-verb agreement) and simplify 'recommend many cool styles to me' for clarity. Use gerund 'wearing' correctly.

× And then I feel like umm is it is umm, a great choice for me?

✓ And then I feel like it is a great choice for me.

The original mixes a question structure and repeats 'is'. Change to a declarative present tense 'it is' to express current feeling. Remove redundant words for grammatical sentence structure.

× Umm I preferred umm wearing smart clothes because umm umm I like because umm I want to be more umm attractive in appearance and umm most of my clothes umm looks umm, looks great uh, but some of them might umm might not be able to.

✓ Umm I prefer wearing smart clothes because I want to look more attractive, and most of my clothes look great, but some of them might not.

The student used 'preferred' (past) though describing a current preference; use present 'prefer'. Also 'clothes' is plural so use 'look' not 'looks'. Remove unnecessary repetition and incomplete ending; finish the clause with 'might not' followed by implied 'look good' or leave as 'might not.' Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yeah, I like wearing T-shirts because, umm, there are many times, umm, where it's very hot and wearing T-shirts can help.

✓ Yeah, I like wearing T-shirts because there are many times when it is very hot and wearing T-shirts helps.

Use 'when' rather than 'where' for times. Replace 'it's' with 'it is' for formality and 'can help' with 'helps' to state a general truth in present tense. This corrects the 'there are' temporal clause usage.

× Yes, definitely umm I often umm spend a lot of time in choosing my clothes, especially when I need to choose my clothes umm umm in shops like there are many umm Staffs and then umm I would choose by myself and when I could not decide umm many stuffs would come. But then I still uh have.

✓ Yes, definitely. I often spend a lot of time choosing my clothes, especially when I need to shop, because there are many staff members and I choose by myself; when I cannot decide, many options appear, but I still decide.

Do not use 'in choosing'—use 'choosing' alone. 'Shop' or 'when shopping' fits better than 'in shops like'. 'Staff' is uncountable; use 'staff members' if countable. 'Stuffs' is incorrect; use 'options' or 'items'. The sentence was run-on and incomplete; restructure into clear clauses and correct prepositions and nouns.

× No, I do not have such a distinction. Umm because umm I buy clothes umm because they are cool and then I could wear them umm, not just in weekend but also in weekday.

✓ No, I do not have such a distinction. I buy clothes because they are cool and I can wear them not just on weekends but also on weekdays.

Use plural 'weekends' and 'weekdays' and the preposition 'on' with days. 'Could' is replaced by 'can' to indicate general ability. Ensure plural forms for general statements.

× Like I'm a student. Then I would wear them during my university. Umm I would also wear them at my weekend when I go to hang out with my friends.

✓ I'm a student, so I wear them at university. I also wear them on weekends when I hang out with my friends.

Use simple present 'wear' for habitual actions rather than 'would' which sounds conditional. Use 'at university' or 'to university' and 'on weekends' for correct prepositions and habitual tense.

× I do not have a special preference on which color umm, for my clothes clothes, but umm, I prefer wearing black clothes because umm, they look cool.

✓ I do not have a special preference for the color of my clothes, but I prefer wearing black because it looks cool.

Use 'preference for' not 'on which', and 'the color of my clothes' is clearer. 'Clothes clothes' is repetitive; remove redundancy. Use 'black' as a noun or 'black clothes' but 'it looks cool' refers to the color generally. Ensure article and prepositional usage.

× Like I, I believe they are umm, cool. And then umm, people would say my clothes are attractive.

✓ I believe they are cool, and people say my clothes are attractive.

Remove filler repetitions and use consistent present tense 'say' to report general opinion. 'They' correctly refers to clothes; keep pronoun reference clear and avoid unnecessary 'would' for habitual statements.