Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("pieces of clothes" twice), and give one specific example to support your preference. Use linking words (for example, because) to make your answer coherent.

예시: I prefer smart-casual clothes. For example, I usually wear well-fitting trousers and a neat shirt to events that aren’t formal because they look polished but are still comfortable.

제안: Make the response more direct and avoid redundancy. Use a clear reason and one brief example. Replace vague phrases like "not necessarily important occasions" with clearer terms.

예시: I prefer comfortable clothes for everyday life because they help me move and focus. For instance, I usually wear chinos and sneakers when I go to work or meet friends casually.

제안: Clarify whether you mean T-shirts or shirts; avoid fillers like "umm" and be specific about what you wear and why. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and give a concrete example or frequency.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts most of the year, especially in spring and summer, because they are practical and comfortable. I usually wear cotton T-shirts with jeans for casual outings rather than reserved, formal shirts.

제안: Open with a direct topic sentence and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking phrases (however, instead) and give a brief contrast with your sister as an example. Remove casual fillers.

예시: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes. Unlike my sister who plans outfits carefully, I decide quickly in my head and then pick the clothes from my wardrobe, which saves me time.

제안: Be clearer and correct word choices ("matte casual" is odd). Start with a clear contrast sentence, explain why with a linking word, and give specific examples of weekday and weekend outfits. Remove hesitation sounds.

예시: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear relaxed, practical clothes like trousers and a simple sweater because I'm busy and prefer comfort while teaching. At the weekend I often dress smarter, for example wearing a blazer or nicer shirt for social events.

제안: Use clearer phrasing and correct grammar. Start with a direct statement about your preference, explain why briefly, and give an example of how you combine colours. Avoid unclear expressions like "It sends to where".

예시: I prefer sober colours, especially black and white, because I find bright colours too loud. For example, I usually pair a black coat with a white shirt for a simple, timeless look.

× I choose clothes depending on the occasion, but I generally prefer smart casual pieces of clothes, like for instance fitting trousers.

✓ I choose clothes depending on the occasion, but I generally prefer smart-casual clothing, for instance fitted trousers.

Use of 'pieces of clothes' is awkward and unidiomatic; 'clothing' or 'pieces of clothing' is better. 'Fitting trousers' is incorrect adjective form; the correct form is the past participle adjective 'fitted' to describe trousers. Hyphenate 'smart-casual' as a compound adjective. Suggestion: replace 'pieces of clothes' with 'clothing' and use 'fitted trousers'.

× I do not wear a tuxedo or elegant clothes because I don't feel like putting them on.

✓ I do not wear a tuxedo or elegant clothes because I don't feel like wearing them.

'Putting them on' is not wrong but is less natural here; 'wearing them' is the more appropriate verb form after 'feel like'. 'Feel like' should be followed by a gerund (verb+ing). Suggestion: use 'wearing' after 'feel like'.

× I definitely prefer to wear comfortable clothes, especially for my routine, because when I go to work or generally when I have dinner with friends, which are not necessarily important occasions, I tend to wear comfortable pieces of clothes.

✓ I definitely prefer to wear comfortable clothes, especially in my daily routine, because when I go to work or have dinner with friends, which are not necessarily important occasions, I tend to wear comfortable clothing.

Use 'in my daily routine' rather than 'for my routine'. 'Pieces of clothes' is awkward; use 'clothing'. Also remove the unnecessary 'generally' for clarity. Suggestion: replace 'for my routine' with 'in my daily routine' and 'pieces of clothes' with 'clothing'.

× I like wearing 2 shirts and I wear them most of the year, especially in the spring and summer season because umm they are practical, comfortable and they make me feel at ease.

✓ I like wearing two shirts and I wear them most of the year, especially in spring and summer, because they are practical, comfortable and make me feel at ease.

Write numbers as words in formal speech: 'two' instead of '2'. 'Spring and summer season' is redundant; 'in spring and summer' is concise. Remove filler 'umm' and duplicate 'they' before 'make' for smoother flow. Suggestion: use words for numbers and avoid fillers.

× I do not necessarily prefer shirts which are for important occasions only.

✓ I do not necessarily prefer shirts that are only for important occasions.

Word order and relative clause: 'shirts which are for important occasions only' is awkward; place 'only' next to what it modifies ('only for important occasions'). Use 'that' for defining relative clauses in informal spoken English. Suggestion: move 'only' to follow the verb phrase it modifies.

× I don't spend much time to include.

✓ I don't spend much time on choosing clothes.

'Spend time' is followed by a gerund or a preposition phrase; 'to include' is ungrammatical here and unclear. The intended meaning is 'spend time choosing (clothes)'. Suggestion: use 'spend much time choosing' or 'spend much time on choosing clothes'.

× Like my sister.

✓ For example, my sister does.

'Like my sister.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or completed with a verb. Suggestion: write 'For example, my sister does.' or attach it to the prior sentence.

× She spends most of the day thinking about the outfit.

✓ She spends most of the day thinking about her outfit.

Use a possessive to clarify whose outfit it is: 'her outfit' is more natural than 'the outfit'. Suggestion: use possessive pronouns for clarity.

× What I do instead is to figure it out in my mind what I want to have on for the occasion, and then I go straight to my wardrobe and pick the pieces of clothes that I want to wear.

✓ What I do instead is figure out in my mind what I want to wear for the occasion, and then I go straight to my wardrobe and pick the clothes I want to wear.

Reduce redundancy: 'is to figure it out in my mind what I want to have on' is wordy and awkward. Use 'figure out what I want to wear'. 'Pieces of clothes' should be 'clothes'. Also avoid repeating 'that I want to wear' twice. Suggestion: simplify phrasing and remove redundancy.

× I do wear differently during the weekdays better than in the weekends because umm, when I go to work and I work as a teacher in the school, I tend to wear matte casual pieces of clothes because I'm tired and so my mood influences what I wear.

✓ I dress differently on weekdays than at weekends because when I go to work as a school teacher, I tend to wear more casual clothes because I'm tired and my mood influences what I wear.

'Do wear differently' is odd; 'dress differently' is better. Use 'on weekdays' and 'at weekends' (or 'on weekends'); compare 'different on weekdays than on weekends'. 'Better than in the weekends' is incorrect comparison structure. 'Matte casual pieces of clothes' is unclear; 'more casual clothes' is natural. Remove filler 'umm' and redundant 'I work'. Suggestion: use 'dress differently on weekdays than at weekends' and 'more casual clothes'.

× Whilst on the weekend I tend to wear smart pieces of clothes.

✓ On weekends I tend to wear smarter clothes.

'Whilst on the weekend' is wordy and 'whilst' is formal/archaic in some varieties; 'On weekends' is simpler. Use comparative 'smarter' to contrast with 'more casual' on weekdays. 'Pieces of clothes' should be 'clothes'. Suggestion: use 'On weekends I wear smarter clothes.'

× It sends to where very sober colours because I do not like extremely vivid tones when it comes to colours and generally I'm huge on black and white pieces of clothes.

✓ I tend to choose very sober colours because I do not like extremely vivid tones, and generally I prefer black and white clothing.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: 'It sends to where' makes no sense. Replace with 'I tend to choose'. Use 'colours' consistently and avoid repeating 'when it comes to colours'. 'I'm huge on' is informal/slang; use 'I prefer'. 'Pieces of clothes' -> 'clothing'. Suggestion: use 'I tend to choose very sober colours' and 'prefer black and white clothing'.