Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail or short example using a linking word. Remove redundant phrases like “for instance” repeated and clarify what “they both” refers to.

예시: I prefer trendy, smart-casual clothes because they make me feel polished and confident. For example, I usually wear a blazer with dark jeans to work, which looks professional yet comfortable.

제안: Answer directly and avoid vague or awkward phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific reason and a brief example with a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they help me concentrate when I study. For example, I usually wear a hoodie and joggers at home so I can sit and work without feeling restricted.

제안: The answer is contradictory and confusing: you say you prefer T-shirts but then give reasons why T-shirts are inappropriate. Make your stance clear (like or dislike) and support it with one specific reason and example, using a linking word.

예시: I don't usually wear T-shirts for formal occasions because they look too informal. For instance, when I go to a restaurant, I choose a collared shirt to appear more presentable.

제안: Be direct and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then explain briefly what you do spend time on. Avoid awkward phrases like 'quality time' and repetition of 'fashionable'.

예시: No, I don't spend much time choosing everyday clothes, but I do take extra care when picking outfits for special occasions. For example, before an important meeting I spend 15–20 minutes selecting a coordinated outfit so I look professional.

× I like to wear trendy and fashionable clothes because they make me look more polished and confident. For example, I usually choose smart casual outfits when I go to work or meet, for instance.

✓ I like to wear trendy and fashionable clothes because they make me look more polished and confident. For example, I usually choose smart casual outfits when I go to work or to meetings.

The phrase 'or meet, for instance' is incorrect and redundant. Use 'to meetings' to correctly express the action and keep parallel structure with 'go to work'. Suggestion: keep parallel infinitive forms (go to work, go to meetings).

× Yes, I do prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because when I'm at home and I'm studying, I don't like being disturbed with uneasy and smart casual clothes.

✓ Yes, I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because when I'm at home studying, I don't like being disturbed by uncomfortable smart-casual clothes.

Use 'prefer' without auxiliary 'do' for simple preference (not required here but acceptable; removed for concision). 'Being disturbed with' is incorrect; use 'disturbed by'. 'Uneasy' is the wrong adjective for clothing; use 'uncomfortable'. Hyphenate 'smart-casual' as a compound adjective. Also combine 'at home and I'm studying' to 'at home studying' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer to wear T-shirts because they often look too informal for planned events or meetings.

✓ I prefer to wear T-shirts, but they often look too informal for planned events or meetings.

Sentence originally contradicts itself: 'I prefer to wear T-shirts because they often look too informal...' That uses 'because' incorrectly. Replacing 'because' with 'but' correctly expresses contrast. No third-person verb change was needed; ID 2 selected because of instruction to label contrast with proper conjunction — however the core issue is conjunction use; the correction fixes logical connector.

× For example, when I go to a dinner or meet friends at a nice restaurant, I usually choose a shirt so I look more presentable.

✓ For example, when I go to dinner or meet friends at a nice restaurant, I usually choose a shirt so I look more presentable.

Use 'go to dinner' (no article) rather than 'go to a dinner' in general statements. The rest is fine; removing the unnecessary article makes the sentence natural.

× No, I don't spend a lot of times using clothes, but I do take a quality time to choose more fashionable and trendy clothes which make my appearance look more presentable and fashionable.

✓ No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes, but I do take time to select fashionable and trendy items that make my appearance more presentable.

'Times' should be singular 'time' after 'a lot of'. 'Using clothes' is incorrect; use 'choosing clothes'. 'A quality time' is unnatural—use 'take time' or 'take some time'. Avoid repeating 'fashionable' twice; 'items' or 'clothes' works. Also change 'which make my appearance look more presentable and fashionable' to the more concise 'that make my appearance more presentable'.