Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and redundancy, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, but, however) and correct noun forms (e.g., light trousers or light pants -> trousers). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I usually wear comfortable clothes, such as light shirts and trousers for everyday activities. However, for celebrations I prefer to wear a fancy dress to look more formal and festive. For example, at weddings I choose a silk dress and simple accessories.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, avoid one-word or abrupt endings like 'That's it.' Use clearer vocabulary (comfortable clothes, not 'comfortable a clothes'), avoid awkward word choices like 'powerful'—use 'comfortable' or 'more relaxed'—and provide a short reason with a linking word (because/so). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed. For instance, when I'm studying or running errands I wear loose trousers and a T-shirt so I am comfortable all day.

제안: Answer directly, remove filler words, and use correct plural/singular forms (e.g., jeans, shorts). Give one specific example of how you wear T-shirts and use a linking phrase (for example/also). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I often pair a plain T-shirt with jeans for casual outings or with shorts when I go to the park.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and then explain with specific timeframes and linking words (for example, if/when). Correct grammar: 'it depends on the event' and avoid fillers. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and be specific about situations and times.

예시: Yes, it depends on the event. For special occasions like celebrations I might spend about half an hour choosing an outfit, but for casual days I usually decide in around 10–15 minutes.

× Usually, uh, I like to wear something comfortable like, uh, a shirt, a light shirt, uh, and uh, a light pants, uh, but if I have like some celebration or something, uh, I prefer to wear a dress, which is like, uh, a fancy dress.

✓ Usually, I like to wear something comfortable, like a shirt or light pants, but if I have a celebration, I prefer to wear a fancy dress.

The errors involve incorrect article use and redundancy. 'A light pants' is incorrect because 'pants' is plural and does not take 'a'; use 'light pants' or 'a pair of light pants'. Also 'a shirt, a light shirt' is repetitive; combine to 'a shirt or light pants'. Remove filler words and repeated 'like' and 'which is like' to make the sentence natural. Use 'a celebration' instead of 'some celebration' for clarity.

× No, I prefer to wear a comfortable clothes because I think it will keep me very, very powerful and it will be easy for me if I want to move, which is a a good thing for me. That's it.

✓ No, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I think they will help me feel more comfortable and make it easier for me to move, which is a good thing for me.

'A comfortable clothes' is incorrect: 'clothes' is plural so do not use 'a'; use 'comfortable clothes'. Pronoun agreement: refer to 'clothes' with 'they' not 'it'. 'Keep me very, very powerful' is unnatural; 'help me feel more comfortable' fits context. Remove duplicate 'a a' and streamline phrasing.

× Yes, I like because it's comfortable and at the same time it's casual. I can wear it with anything like with the bands or uh uh, a jeans, uh, or in the same time a short. So that's why I like T-shirts.

✓ Yes, I like them because they're comfortable and casual. I can wear them with anything, like jeans, shorts, or a jacket. That's why I like T-shirts.

Pronoun misuse: 'I like because it's' lacks object—should be 'I like them' referring to T-shirts. Use plural pronouns 'they'/'them' for T-shirts. 'a jeans' and 'a short' are incorrect; use 'jeans' (plural) and 'shorts' (plural) or 'a pair of jeans/shorts'. 'Bands' likely meant 'blazers' or 'pants'—clarify to common pairings such as 'jacket'.

× Yes. For me it's depend about uh, the event, which event I will go. If it's like something celebrates, uh, I will take a long time, like for maybe half an hour. Uh, if it's something casual or something like that, maybe I will take umm, 15 minutes.

✓ Yes. For me it depends on the event I will attend. If it's a celebration, I will take a long time, maybe half an hour. If it's something casual, I might take about 15 minutes.

Verb form and preposition errors: 'it's depend' should be 'it depends' (subject-verb agreement and present tense). Use 'depends on' rather than 'depend about'. 'Which event I will go' is awkward; use 'the event I will attend' or 'I am going to'. 'Something celebrates' is incorrect—use noun 'a celebration'. Also adjust future/modal consistency: use 'I will take' or 'I might take' for possibility and natural expression.