Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Fix verb forms and sentence structure (e.g., "is" → "are" for plural, avoid unclear phrases like "all and one thing").

예시: I usually wear everyday dresses because they are a single-piece outfit and easy to put on. For example, when it is cold I prefer them because they often have long sleeves and keep me warm. Also, they save time in the morning since I don’t need to match separate items.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then add a brief reason with linking words. Reduce filler words (uh) and avoid repeating phrases. Use correct prepositions ("depends on"), and provide a concise example of an occasion.

예시: It depends on the occasion: I usually wear comfortable, casual clothes for everyday activities because they are practical. However, if I have a formal meeting or celebration, I choose smart clothes to look more professional. For instance, I wear a blazer and trousers for job interviews.

제안: Answer directly with a clean topic sentence and give one clear, specific reason. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases ("in a wide way", "church a lot"). Use correct articles and plural/singular forms. Offer a short alternative example of what you prefer.

예시: No, I don't like wearing T-shirts because I prefer clothes that cover my arms and chest. I feel more comfortable in long-sleeved tops or a light coat. For example, I often choose a blouse or a cardigan instead of a T-shirt.

제안: Give a direct answer, use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement, and replace awkward phrases with natural expressions. Support your answer with a brief reason and a specific example. Remove unrelated or unclear phrases ("first science person").

예시: No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I prefer to get dressed quickly and efficiently. For example, I pick outfits the night before or choose simple dresses so I can leave the house fast in the morning.

× I usually wear everyday dresses is my favorite kind of clothes because it's an only piece.

✓ I usually wear everyday dresses; they are my favorite kind of clothes because they are single-piece garments.

The original sentence mixes singular and plural and misuses pronouns and verbs. 'Everyday dresses' is plural so use plural verb 'are' and pronoun 'they'. 'It's an only piece' is incorrect; use 'single-piece garment' to describe a one-piece dress. Improve by matching number (singular/plural) and using clearer vocabulary.

× Then I used to think in all and one thing to dress up myself then I prefer it maybe a cold because it cover my arms.

✓ I used to think about dressing in one simple way, and now I prefer it, maybe because it's cold and it covers my arms.

The original mixes tense and has incorrect prepositions and verb forms. Use 'used to' for past habits and 'think about' for the correct preposition. 'Prefer' must agree with context; use 'now I prefer it'. 'It cover' should be 'it covers' for third person singular. Also add 'because it's cold' for clarity.

× Well, it depends of the occasion because uh, some days I wear comfortable or and casual clothes because uh I have not an important event to wear smart clothes.

✓ Well, it depends on the occasion because some days I wear comfortable, casual clothes when I don't have an important event that requires smart clothes.

Use 'depends on' not 'depends of'. 'Comfortable or and casual' is redundant; use 'comfortable, casual'. 'I have not an important event' is unnatural; use 'I don't have an important event'. Also restructure for clarity and correct verb forms.

× Then it depends of the day and the activity I will do in a day.

✓ Then it depends on the day and the activities I will do that day.

Use 'depends on' not 'depends of'. Avoid repeating 'in a day'; say 'that day'. Use plural 'activities' for generality.

× No I don't like wearing T-shirts at all because I like cover all my arms and my chest.

✓ No, I don't like wearing T-shirts at all because I like to cover my arms and chest.

Missing infinitive marker 'to' before 'cover'. 'All my arms' is redundant; use 'my arms'. Keep pronouns and verb forms consistent.

× I don't like to be in a wide way I like to be covered.

✓ I don't like to appear wide; I prefer to be covered.

'In a wide way' is unidiomatic; use 'appear wide' or 'look revealing'. Use parallel structure with 'I prefer to be covered.'

× Then I don't like church a lot T-shirts sorry T-shirts at all.

✓ Also, I don't like wearing T-shirts to church at all.

Word order and prepositions are incorrect. 'Church a lot T-shirts' is jumbled; clarify intended meaning 'to church'. Remove unnecessary words and apologize clause.

× Then I prefer all other type of clothes like a coat or.

✓ I prefer other types of clothes, like a coat or jacket.

Use plural 'types' to agree with 'other'. 'Like a coat or' is incomplete; provide a parallel noun 'jacket'. Proper noun phrases and plural agreement improve clarity.

× No, I usually shows up, shows my clothes quickly because I am a efficient persons.

✓ No, I usually choose my clothes quickly because I am an efficient person.

'Shows up, shows my clothes' is incorrect verb choice; use 'choose'. 'Shows' is third person singular; 'I' requires 'show' but better 'choose'. 'A efficient persons' has article and number errors; use 'an efficient person' (note 'an' before vowel sound).

× I am a first science person.

✓ I am a very practical person.

'First science person' is unclear and ungrammatical. Likely intent was to convey practicality or scientific approach; provide a natural equivalent 'very practical person.' Adjust vocabulary for clarity.

× I like to to do everything very quick, rapid.

✓ I like to do everything very quickly.

Remove duplicate 'to to'. Use adverb 'quickly' not adjectives 'quick, rapid' to modify the verb. Avoid redundancy.

× I don't like to be sluggish because time is gold, then I need to time.

✓ I don't like to be sluggish because time is precious, so I need to manage it well.

'Time is gold' is a literal translation; use 'time is precious' or 'time is valuable'. 'I need to time' is incomplete; use 'manage it well'. Conjunction 'so' better connects cause and result than 'then'.