Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and limited repetition, and avoid unclear phrases (e.g. 'wide headphone', 'Whitehead'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect points.

예시: Yes. I use over-ear headphones every day because they have active noise cancellation and deliver clear sound. For example, when I listen to podcasts or music while commuting, I can hear voices clearly and blocked outside noise, so I can concentrate better.

제안: Answer directly with the specific type and one clear reason. Avoid repeating previous words and correct word choice (e.g. 'wired' or 'wireless', 'over-ear'). Use a linking word to explain the benefit.

예시: I use over-ear, wireless noise-cancelling headphones because they reduce background noise and make speech and music clearer, which helps me focus during study sessions.

제안: Start with a clear statement about situations, then give two concise, specific reasons. Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'so' and avoid filler phrases like 'doing nothing' and 'some like'.

예시: I use headphones while commuting to school, when I work, and in my free time. For example, I listen to podcasts to learn new things and to music to relax, which helps me feel refreshed.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence naming specific situations, then briefly explain why. Avoid vague repetition and grammatical errors; use linking words like 'for example' and 'because'.

예시: I would not wear headphones when someone is speaking to me or during face-to-face conversations because it is rude and prevents effective communication. For example, I remove them if a colleague asks me a question so I can give my full attention.

제안: Give a clear balanced opinion with one supporting example for each side. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'comfortable', 'uncomfortable', 'wired'), and avoid awkward phrasing like 'when we are doing nothing'. Link ideas with 'however' or 'but'.

예시: I find headphones both comfortable and uncomfortable. For instance, over-ear headphones are comfortable for long listening sessions, but wired or heavy models can be uncomfortable during exercise, so I prefer lightweight earbuds when I work out.

× Yes I use headphones on my daily basis like the most preferable headphone.

✓ Yes, I use headphones on a daily basis; they are my preferred headphones.

The indefinite article 'a' is needed in 'on a daily basis' and 'headphones' is plural so use 'they are' rather than 'the most preferable headphone'. Also 'most preferable' is awkward; 'preferred' is natural.

× I preferred headphone as my wide headphone cause it is noise cancellation as well as it gives me a proper voice.

✓ I prefer wide headphones because they have noise cancellation and give me clear sound.

Use present simple 'prefer' for a habitual preference. 'Headphone' should be plural 'headphones'. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'Noise cancellation' is described with 'have' and 'proper voice' should be 'clear sound'.

× If I am listening some podcast or anything I can hear it very properly.

✓ If I am listening to a podcast or anything, I can hear it very clearly.

Use the preposition 'to' after 'listening'. 'Hear it very properly' is unidiomatic; use the adverb 'clearly'.

× Instead of using Airpods I prefer Whitehead white headphones.

✓ Instead of using AirPods, I prefer Whitehead white headphones.

Add a comma after the introductory phrase. 'AirPods' is a proper noun capitalized as a brand. If 'Whitehead' is a brand name, capitalize it; keep 'white headphones' as descriptive. No article needed here.

× Yes I already mentioned that I use fired headphones cause it as noise cancellation as well as it helped me to clear easily listened so I prefer the wide headphones.

✓ Yes, I already mentioned that I use wired headphones because they have noise cancellation and help me hear clearly, so I prefer wide headphones.

'Fired' seems to be a mistake for 'wired'. Use 'because' instead of 'cause'. Use plural pronoun 'they' for 'headphones'. 'Helped me to clear easily listened' is ungrammatical; use 'help me hear clearly'. Drop the definite article before 'wide headphones' unless speaking about specific ones.

× I use headphones when I go to school or when I'm working and most of the time when I'm free and doing nothing I prefer to listen music or podcast for getting or gain some knowledge from there and help me to get some like fresh and relaxed mood.

✓ I use headphones when I go to school or when I'm working, and most of the time when I'm free I prefer to listen to music or podcasts to gain knowledge and to relax.

Use 'listen to' with 'music' and 'podcasts'. Keep verb forms parallel: 'to gain' and 'to relax'. 'Doing nothing' is redundant with 'free'. Use plural 'podcasts' for generality.

× Like it shows our basic manners and what conditions we should not use headphones.

✓ For example, it shows basic manners and the situations in which we should not use headphones.

'Like' is informal; use 'for example'. 'What conditions we should not use' should be 'the situations in which we should not use'. Avoid 'our' if speaking generally.

× Like if somebody is come and communicating to us, we should not use our headphones and we need to talk to that person 'cause it shows our basic manners to listen that person and how.

✓ If somebody comes and speaks to us, we should not use our headphones and should talk to that person because it is polite to listen to them.

Use simple present 'comes' for habitual situation. 'Is come and communicating' is incorrect. Use 'speaks to us' or 'talks to us'. 'Listen that person' should be 'listen to them' and 'it shows our basic manners' is better as 'it is polite'.

× And one more thing, we should not use headphones.

✓ Also, we should avoid using headphones in that situation.

Clarify the context: say 'in that situation' to indicate when not to use headphones. 'One more thing' is informal and vague.

× According to my perspective, wearing headphones is comfortable and not comfortable at same point of view 'cause if we're working or doing something like a exercise and wired headphones give us our trouble.

✓ From my perspective, wearing headphones can be comfortable and uncomfortable at the same time because if we're working or doing something like exercise, wired headphones can cause problems.

'According to my perspective' is awkward; use 'From my perspective'. 'At same point of view' should be 'at the same time'. 'A exercise' requires 'an exercise' or simply 'exercise'. 'Give us our trouble' should be 'cause problems'.

× So I guess when we are free or when we are doing nothing, we should use quiet headphones at that time of moment.

✓ So I think when we are free or not doing anything, we should use quiet headphones at that time.

'Guess' is informal; 'think' is more natural. 'At that time of moment' is redundant; 'at that time' is sufficient. 'Doing nothing' is fine but 'not doing anything' flows better.