Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear direct topic sentence and keep it concise. Avoid repetition (e.g., “really” twice) and add a brief specific reason or an alternative. Use one or two linking words to make it coherent.

예시: Not really. I avoid headphones because they irritate my ears if I wear them for more than about 30 minutes. Instead, I usually use speakers or short earbuds for quick calls.

제안: Begin with a direct answer naming the type, then give a concise reason. Remove uncertain phrasing like “They might have said earlier”. Be specific about the model or feature and use a linking word to connect reason.

예시: I usually use wired over-ear headphones. I prefer wired models because they give more reliable sound and I don't want to worry about battery life.

제안: Good direct answer and reason. Improve naturalness by using slightly more formal language (avoid texting contractions like “wanna”) and add a short time reference or example. Use a linking word to connect purpose and condition.

예시: I usually wear headphones when I watch video lectures because I need to concentrate and block out background noise. For example, I put them on during evening study sessions at home.

제안: Answer directly and expand with a specific reason and a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrasing; explain why you avoid them in that situation and provide an alternative.

예시: I avoid headphones when watching movies on my iPod because the small device has poor sound and I prefer using external speakers for better audio quality.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and add a brief specific detail (how long is “a really long time”, what exactly is uncomfortable). Remove filler phrases like “Like what I've said earlier.”

예시: Not really. Wearing headphones for more than 30–40 minutes becomes uncomfortable for me, especially around the ears and headband, so I take regular breaks.

× I really don't like using headphones because my ears are really getting irritated when using it for a long time.

✓ I really don't like using headphones because my ears get really irritated when I use them for a long time.

The sentence mixes singular and plural pronouns: 'headphones' is plural so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. Also the progressive 'are really getting irritated' is unnatural for a general statement; use simple present 'get' to describe habitual or general reactions. Change 'using it' to 'I use them' to match subject and plurality. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× They might have said earlier I don't really use headphones, and if I'm using one it is the headphones with the wire connected, not the Airpods 1.

✓ I might have said earlier that I don't really use headphones, and if I do use them they are wired headphones, not AirPods.

Use 'I might have said earlier' to express possible prior statement; include conjunction 'that' after 'said' for clarity. 'If I'm using one' is awkward because 'one' suggests singular; use 'if I do use them' to match plural 'headphones'. 'the headphones with the wire connected' is unidiomatic; use 'wired headphones'. 'Airpods 1' should be 'AirPods'. This corrects pronoun and article usage and improves natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Usually I'm using headphones when I am watching a video lecture that really needs a focus and I don't wanna be bothered with the excessive noise outside.

✓ Usually I use headphones when I watch a video lecture that requires concentration and I don't want to be bothered by excessive outside noise.

For habitual actions, use the simple present ('I use', 'I watch') rather than present continuous ('I'm using'). 'Needs a focus' is incorrect collocation; use 'requires concentration'. Avoid informal 'wanna' in standard responses; use 'want to'. Use 'bothered by' rather than 'bothered with' and place adjectives appropriately: 'excessive outside noise'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I don't really want to use headphones when watching a movie using my iPod.

✓ I don't really want to use headphones when watching a movie on my iPod.

Use the preposition 'on' with devices when referring to watching or playing content ('on my iPod'), not 'using'. The verb repetition 'watching a movie using my iPod' is awkward; 'watching a movie on my iPod' is concise and correct. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Like what I've said earlier, for me using a headphones for a really long time is very uncomfortable.

✓ As I said earlier, using headphones for a really long time is very uncomfortable for me.

'A headphones' is incorrect because 'headphones' is plural and does not take 'a'; remove the article. 'Like what I've said earlier' is informal and slightly awkward; 'As I said earlier' is more natural. Place 'for me' at the end for clarity. Also prefer simple present 'is' for a general statement. Grammar problem type ID: 22