Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a complete sentence that directly answers and briefly expands. Avoid one-word answers by adding a short reason or context.

예시: Yes, I do. I use headphones most days because they help me concentrate and block out background noise.

제안: Begin with a full topic sentence naming the type, then add a specific reason and an example using a linking word like “because” or “so”.

예시: I use wireless headphones because they are convenient and let me move around without getting tangled, so I can cook or clean while listening to music.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific activities and times, using linking words (e.g., “especially”, “because”) to make the answer coherent.

예시: I use headphones almost every day, especially in shared areas like the living room, because they let me listen to podcasts without disturbing others.

제안: Structure the reply: state the situation, give clear reasons and a specific example. Remove repetition and improve vocabulary (e.g., “in my room”, “play music on speakers”, “soft/soothing piano music”).

예시: I usually don't wear headphones when I'm in my own room; instead, I play music on speakers at a low volume because it feels more relaxing. For example, when I'm studying I play soft solo piano pieces, which help me concentrate without wearing earphones.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating that comfort varies, then explain specific modes and effects concisely. Use correct collocations (e.g., “noise-cancelling mode”, “feel uncomfortable”) and fewer hesitations.

예시: It depends on the settings: sometimes headphones are comfortable, but in noise-cancelling mode my AirPods press on my ears and feel uncomfortable. In transparent or normal mode, however, they are comfortable for long use.

× Wireless because it's convenient.

✓ Wireless, because they're convenient.

The noun 'headphones' is plural, so the pronoun referring to them must be plural. 'It's' is singular (it is) and does not agree with 'headphones'. Use 'they're' (they are) or 'they are' to match plural subject. Also adding a comma improves readability.

× Almost every day, especially in common area.

✓ Almost every day, especially in the common area.

The phrase requires the definite article 'the' before 'common area' to specify a particular place. This is an article/preposition-related error; add 'the' for correct noun phrase: 'the common area.'

× I usually wouldn't use a headphone when I'm in my my own room.

✓ I usually wouldn't use headphones when I'm in my own room.

'Headphone' (singular) is incorrect here because people normally refer to a pair as 'headphones' (plural). Also remove the duplicated 'my'. Use 'headphones' to match common usage.

× I always will just put the music on the speaker more like, but I don't put it too loud too.

✓ I usually just play the music on the speaker, but I don't put it too loud.

Awkward word order and incorrect adverb choice: 'always will just put' is unnatural; use 'usually just play'. 'Put the music on the speaker' is better as 'play the music on the speaker.' Remove the redundant 'too' and 'more like'. This fixes pronoun/word usage and improves natural phrasing.

× For example, when I'm studying I often listen to some soothing music like the tsunami piano music when I study.

✓ For example, when I'm studying I often listen to soothing music, such as tsunami piano music.

Repetition of 'when I study' is redundant. 'Some' is unnecessary and 'like the tsunami piano music' is better expressed as 'such as tsunami piano music.' This simplifies the sentence and avoids redundancy.

× So this is the time for me to really relax my ear without wearing the earphones.

✓ So this is the time for me to really relax my ears without wearing earphones.

Use plural 'ears' instead of singular 'ear' because people have two ears; 'earphones' without 'the' is more natural in this generic statement. This fixes pronoun/number usage.

× I would say actually it depends on the mood of the headphone that I set.

✓ I would say it actually depends on the mode of the headphones that I set.

'Mood' is the wrong noun; 'mode' is appropriate for device settings. 'Headphone' should be plural 'headphones' to match. Also move 'actually' for natural word order. This fixes vocabulary and number agreement relevant to present-tense description.

× So for example right now I'm using the Airpods.

✓ So, for example, right now I'm using AirPods.

This is mainly a capitalization/branding note: 'AirPods' is the correct product name. Also commas around the introductory phrase improve readability. The sentence is otherwise acceptable.

× So if I use the noise cancelling mode, the earphone will be really attached to my ear and it's feel really uncomfortable.

✓ So if I use the noise-cancelling mode, the earphones feel very tight in my ears and are really uncomfortable.

Multiple issues: use plural 'earphones' and 'ears' (singular mismatch), 'it's feel' is ungrammatical (mixes 'it is' with verb), and 'really attached to my ear' is awkward. Use 'feel very tight in my ears' and 'are really uncomfortable.' Hyphenate 'noise-cancelling' as a compound adjective.

× But otherwise if I feel the use the transparent mode or the normal mode, it will be comfortable.

✓ But if I use the transparent mode or the normal mode, they are comfortable.

Incorrect phrasing 'if I feel the use the' is ungrammatical. Use 'if I use' to indicate present habit. Refer to 'they' (headphones) and 'are comfortable' for correct subject-verb agreement in present tense.