Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), avoid repeating the examiner's words, correct vocabulary (headphones not handphones), and use one or two supporting details with a linking word. Keep within 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually wear headphones. I often use them when I listen to music or talk to my parents because they help reduce background noise and let me hear more clearly.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the type, then give a specific reason using linking words. Use correct tense and avoid vague phrases. Keep it concise and finish the thought (complete sentence).

예시: I usually use wireless over-ear headphones because they are compact and easy to carry. Also, they block out noise well, which is useful on crowded subways.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence (when), then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use correct vocabulary and present simple for habitual actions.

예시: I use headphones whenever I’m in noisy places such as the subway, train stations or busy streets. This helps block out background noise so I can concentrate on music or calls.

제안: First state clearly when you would not use them (e.g. when safety or politeness matters). Provide one or two specific situations with linking words and avoid contradicting earlier statements. Use correct grammar and finish sentences fully.

예시: I wouldn’t use headphones when I’m crossing the road or walking in busy traffic because I need to hear my surroundings for safety. I also avoid them during face-to-face conversations out of respect.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with 1–2 specific details or examples using linking words. Use correct vocabulary and tense. Avoid unclear phrases like “there's nothing to have.”

예시: Yes, I find them comfortable, especially lightweight earphones that don’t press on my ears. In fact, I sometimes wear soft headphones while sleeping because they are light and don’t disturb me.

× You use headphones? Yes, I usually use handphones, especially when I listen to the music or talk to my parents.

✓ Do you use headphones? Yes, I usually use headphones, especially when I listen to music or talk to my parents.

The student used 'You use headphones?' which is a repetition of the examiner's question and should be 'Do you use headphones?' for correct question form. 'Handphones' is incorrect; the correct word is 'headphones'. Also 'the music' is unnecessary; say 'music'. Use 'I usually use headphones' to maintain correct pronoun and noun usage.

× In order to make the environment quiet, I really take headphones.

✓ In order to make the environment quiet, I usually wear headphones.

The verb 'take' with 'headphones' is incorrect in this context; native speakers 'wear' headphones. 'Really' is awkward here; 'usually' better matches the frequency stated. The prepositional idea 'in order to' is fine but the verb choice needed correction.

× I usually wear wireless headphones. It is meaning 'cause they are small and easy to take whenever I was in a noisy place like subway or.

✓ I usually wear wireless headphones. They are small and easy to carry when I am in noisy places like the subway.

'It is meaning' is ungrammatical; simply use 'They are...' to refer to 'headphones'. 'Take' should be 'carry' or 'bring'; 'whenever I was' mixes tenses — use present 'when I am'. Add 'the' before 'subway' for correct article use.

× As I mentioned, whenever I was in a noisy place like subway, train station or busy street, I really wear my handphones.

✓ As I mentioned, whenever I am in a noisy place like the subway, a train station, or a busy street, I wear my headphones.

The original mixes past tense 'was' with a habitual action; use present simple 'am' and 'wear' for habits. 'Handphones' should be 'headphones'. Add articles 'the' or 'a' as appropriate for locations.

× It is mainly because the environment is noisy and I want to block out the environment and focus on myself.

✓ It is mainly because the surroundings are noisy and I want to block them out and focus on myself.

Repeating 'environment' is awkward; use 'surroundings' or 'noise' and refer back with the pronoun 'them' for clarity. 'Block out the environment' is unidiomatic; 'block them out' or 'block out the noise' is natural.

× It will make me.

✓ They help me concentrate.

'It will make me' is an incomplete clause lacking an object or complement. Replace with a complete, idiomatic sentence that states the intended effect: 'They help me concentrate.' Use plural 'they' to refer to headphones.

× There are lots of conditions I will used hand phones.

✓ There are lots of situations in which I will use headphones.

'Conditions' is awkward; 'situations' fits better. 'I will used' mixes modal and past participle; use 'I will use' or simply 'I use'. 'Hand phones' should be 'headphones'.

× For example if I was in a noisy place to block out the environment I will use headphones.

✓ For example, if I am in a noisy place and want to block out the noise, I will use headphones.

The sentence mixes tenses: 'if I was' (past) with 'I will' (future). Use present tense in the if-clause for first conditional: 'if I am' and 'I will' in the main clause. Also improve phrasing: 'and want to block out the noise'.

× On top of that I felt over stress I.

✓ On top of that, I feel very stressed.

'Felt' is past tense and does not match the habitual statement; use present 'feel'. 'Over stress' is incorrect; use 'very stressed' or 'overstressed'. Remove the stray 'I' at the end.

× Yes, definitely. Sometimes when I wear the handles I feel there's nothing to have.

✓ Yes, definitely. Sometimes when I wear the headphones I feel like I'm not wearing anything.

'Handles' is incorrect; use 'headphones'. 'There's nothing to have' is ungrammatical and unclear; the intended meaning is 'I feel like I'm not wearing anything', which is idiomatic and clear.

× Sometimes I even wear my headphones while I was sleeping.

✓ Sometimes I even wear my headphones while I sleep.

Use present simple 'I sleep' to describe habitual actions ('sometimes I even wear...'). 'While I was sleeping' (past continuous) suggests a specific past event; change to present to match the habitual context.