Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give concise reasons with specific details. Avoid unclear words (e.g. “heartburn”) and grammar errors. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often use headphones when I listen to music. I usually wear them on the subway because they help me block out background noise and relax during my commute.

제안: Give a direct answer naming the type or brand, then give a reason. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect words. Use simple descriptive vocabulary (e.g. ‘over-ear’, ‘in-ear’, ‘wireless’) and one linking phrase like ‘because’.

예시: I usually use over-ear wireless headphones because they are comfortable for long journeys and have good noise isolation.

제안: This answer is fairly clear but a little repetitive. Start with one clear sentence and add a specific example or time. Use a linking word to connect the reason.

예시: I use headphones whenever I listen to music, especially during my commute on the subway, because they help me focus and block out other passengers’ conversations.

제안: The answer is unclear and contradictory. Directly state situations when you wouldn’t use headphones (for safety, conversations, or rules), then give a reason. Keep it to one or two sentences and use clear linking words like ‘when’ or ‘because’.

예시: I wouldn’t wear headphones when I’m crossing the street or when someone is talking to me, because I need to hear traffic and be aware of important information.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a clear opinion, then one or two brief supporting details (comfort, convenience, or sound quality). Correct common grammar errors (e.g. ‘easiest’, ‘put them on’).

예시: Yes, I find them comfortable because the padding fits well and they are quick to put on, so I can start listening almost immediately.

× Yes, I tend to use headphone when listening to music.

✓ Yes, I tend to use headphones when listening to music.

The noun 'headphone' is countable and when referring to the common device in general we use the plural form 'headphones'. Use plural with 'use' to match meaning. Suggestion: Learn countable plural forms for common items (headphone -> headphones).

× I especially use headphone in traffic moment such as when I was in subway because heartburn makes me make my eyes more comfortable.

✓ I especially use headphones in traffic, for example when I am on the subway, because earphones make my ears feel more comfortable.

Several issues: 'in traffic moment' is unnatural — use 'in traffic' or 'when travelling'. 'when I was in subway' requires article and present tense for habitual action: 'when I am on the subway'. 'heartburn' is incorrect word for ear discomfort; use 'earphones' or 'headphones' and 'make my ears more comfortable'. Suggestion: Use natural phrases for situations (in traffic, on the subway) and correct nouns for body parts (ears).

× Actually I don't know the that types of headphones, but I usually use the famous one because quintessential people use hardballs and normal design.

✓ Actually I don't know the different types of headphones, but I usually use a popular brand because most people use simple, standard designs.

Errors: extra 'the' ('the that'), wrong noun 'famous one' should be 'a popular brand', 'quintessential people' is incorrect — use 'most people', 'hardballs' is wrong word — likely 'earbuds' or 'over-ear' but context suggests 'simple' designs. Pronouns and determiners were used incorrectly. Suggestion: Use 'different types', 'a popular brand', and clear vocabulary for headphone styles (earbuds, over-ear, on-ear).

× As I mentioned, I usually I tend to use headphones when I listen to music and especially use them on the subway because I want to block the sound from the commuters.

✓ As I mentioned, I usually tend to use headphones when I listen to music, and I especially use them on the subway because I want to block out the noise from other commuters.

Redundancy ('usually I tend' — use one), missing particle 'block out' needed, 'the commuters' should be 'other commuters' for clarity. Also add comma and conjunction to join clauses properly. Suggestion: Avoid redundant adverbs (usually/tend); use 'block out the noise' and 'other commuters' for natural phrasing.

× I reckon that that might be uncomfortable because when I was in a public place I usually use headphones because I want to block out from the others noise. Noise and 1.

✓ I reckon that it might be uncomfortable; when I am in a public place I usually avoid using headphones because I don't want to block out other people's sounds.

Problems: double 'that', inconsistent tense ('when I was' should be habitual present 'when I am'), incorrect phrase 'block out from the others noise' and misplaced fragment 'Noise and 1.' The meaning seems reversed: student earlier said they use headphones to block noise but here discussing not using them. Clarified to a coherent sentence. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habitual actions (present simple) and use correct phrase 'other people's sounds' or 'other people's noise'. Remove fragments.

× Yes, because wearing headphones is the most easiest way for me because when I want to use them I just pick up that, pick up my headphone and just put off on my head.

✓ Yes, because wearing headphones is the easiest way for me; when I want to use them I just pick them up and put them on my head.

Error: 'most easiest' is a double comparative — use 'easiest' only. 'pick up that' is unclear; use 'pick them up'. 'pick up my headphone' should be plural 'headphones'. 'put off on my head' is wrong — correct is 'put them on my head'. Suggestion: Use correct comparative/superlative forms (easy -> easiest), and use appropriate pronouns for objects (them for headphones).

× So I think it is a quite comfortable for me.

✓ So I think it is quite comfortable for me.

Error: unnecessary indefinite article 'a' before 'quite comfortable'. With adjective phrase after 'is', do not use 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'quite comfortable' without 'a'.