Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: use correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Maintain 3–4 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I use headphones — a pair of Marshall wireless ones. I usually wear them when I walk alone because music helps lift my mood. For example, I often listen to upbeat playlists to feel more energetic during my commute.

제안: Correct vocabulary and phrasing (e.g., 'I own', 'over a year', 'active noise cancellation'), and avoid awkward collocations. Use one linking word to connect features and personal experience. Keep it within 4 sentences.

예시: I own a pair of Marshall wireless headphones. They have excellent sound quality and active noise cancellation, which makes them ideal for commuting. Moreover, I've used them for over a year and they are comfortable with long battery life, so I rarely encounter problems.

제안: Make sentences clearer and avoid filler words and repetition. Use correct phrases ('commuting to work', 'listen to audio and podcasts') and a linking word to explain purpose. Limit to 3–4 sentences and give a specific example or routine.

예시: I use my headphones almost every day when commuting to work and when walking alone. I listen to music or podcasts to stay focused and entertained. For instance, I usually catch up on a podcast during my 30‑minute commute.

제안: Be concise and use precise vocabulary ('when I'm with others', 'aware of my surroundings'). Start with a topic sentence and use a linking word to add a second reason. Keep it natural and within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I avoid using headphones when I'm with other people because I prefer to chat and enjoy their company. Also, I don't wear them when I'm in busy places so I can stay aware of my surroundings and be safe.

× Yes I do, I have one headphones from Marshall.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a pair of Marshall headphones.

'Headphones' is plural; using 'one' with a plural noun is incorrect. Use 'a pair of' to refer to a single set of headphones. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and separate into two sentences for clarity.

× Normally use it for hearing songs because songs can help me to change my mood.

✓ I normally use them to listen to songs because songs can help change my mood.

Subject is missing before 'use'; 'headphones' is plural so use 'them'. 'Hearing songs' is unnatural here; use 'listen to songs'. 'Help me to change' is wordy — 'help change my mood' is more natural.

× I owe a pair of Marshall wireless headphones.

✓ I own a pair of Marshall wireless headphones.

The verb 'owe' means to be in debt; the correct verb to indicate possession is 'own'. This is a word choice error classified under third person singular because the verb form was incorrect in context.

× They have great sound quality and useful features such as Lightning character and active nice noise cancellation.

✓ They have great sound quality and useful features such as a Lightning connector and active noise cancellation.

'Lightning character' is incorrect; likely intended 'Lightning connector'. 'Active nice noise cancellation' has wrong word order and an unnecessary adjective; 'active noise cancellation' is the correct term. Adjective order and word choice needed correction.

× I have heard them for over a year and they are comfortable with the long battery life, so I rarely have any problems using them.

✓ I have had them for over a year, and they are comfortable with long battery life, so I rarely have any problems using them.

Use present perfect 'have had' to indicate possession over a period. 'Have heard them' implies listening to them, not owning them. Remove 'the' before 'long battery life' unless specifying a particular battery life; 'long battery life' is general.

× I use my headphones normally every day while I am commuting to my job or afterwards because normally I am alone while I am TR walking.

✓ I normally use my headphones every day while commuting to work or afterwards because I am often alone while walking to work.

Word order: 'normally' best before the verb. 'Commuting to my job' is awkward; 'commuting to work' is natural. 'TR walking' is unclear and seems erroneous—likely 'walking to work' was intended. Remove unnecessary 'am' before 'commuting' and reduce repetition of 'normally/ often'.

× So the headphones can help me to engage with the audios and podcast, that's why I use them.

✓ So the headphones can help me engage with audio and podcasts; that's why I use them.

'The audios' is incorrect — 'audio' (uncountable) or 'audio content' is better. 'Podcast' should be plural as general category 'podcasts'. Remove 'to' after 'help' when followed by a verb. Use a semicolon or split sentences to avoid comma splice.

× When I am at the summit, I don't use headphones because I prefer to keep the company and talk to them.

✓ When I am at a gathering, I don't use headphones because I prefer to keep people company and talk to them.

'At the summit' is likely wrong contextually; 'summit' usually means a conference and may be correct but 'keep the company' is ungrammatical — use 'keep company' or 'keep people company'. Added 'people' to clarify who is being kept company. This fixes article and collocation errors.

× Also, if I am working with a friend, I want to be aware of our surrounding and able to have conversations.

✓ Also, if I am working with a friend, I want to be aware of our surroundings and able to have conversations.

Use plural 'surroundings' rather than singular 'surrounding'. 'Aware of' is correct; changing 'surrounding' to 'surroundings' fixes the preposition-related noun form error.