Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and avoid hesitation; include a brief reason with specific details and a linking phrase. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. For example, state preference, then explain how happy music relaxes you and give a short example of when you listen to it.

예시: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax after a stressful day. For example, I usually play upbeat pop or acoustic songs while making dinner, which lifts my mood and clears my mind.

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating a previous response. Use linking words to contrast excitement and relaxation, and give a specific example or comparison. Two to three sentences are enough.

예시: Not usually — happy music makes me feel calm rather than excited. For instance, I listen to mellow upbeat tracks to unwind, while I choose fast electronic music when I want to feel energetic.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then expand with specific details about how you learn music independently and what activities you do. Use linking words like 'however' or 'instead' to connect ideas and give one concrete example.

예시: No, I haven't taken any formal music classes. Instead, I learn by watching online tutorials and practicing the guitar for 30 minutes every evening, which helps me improve steadily.

제안: Begin with a direct 'yes' or 'no', then give specific situations and a brief explanation of the effect music has on you. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to make your answer coherent and include one concrete example.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I put on soft instrumental music when studying to improve concentration, and I play upbeat songs while cleaning to boost my energy.

× I prefer happy music because, uh, it's helped me relax.

✓ I prefer happy music because, uh, it helps me relax.

The original uses 'it's helped' (present perfect) which conflicts with the general preference statement. The meaning is present habitual effect, so the simple present 'it helps' is appropriate. Use simple present for general truths and habits. Suggestion: use 'it helps me relax' when describing an ongoing or regular effect of music.

× I prefer happy music because, uh, it's helped me relax.

✓ I prefer happy music because, uh, it helps me relax.

Same sentence repeated for the second question; change present perfect 'it's helped' to simple present 'it helps' to match the present-tense question about how music makes you feel. Use simple present for habitual effects.

× No, I haven't taken any music classes but I love practice through music because I really enjoy it.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I love practicing music because I really enjoy it.

'love practice through music' is ungrammatical: 'practice' needs to be a gerund 'practicing' or use 'practice' as a noun with an article. Also a comma is needed before 'but' when joining independent clauses. Use 'practicing music' to indicate the activity. Suggestion: use 'I love practicing music' or 'I love to practice music.'

× Yes, I listen to music while doing other things because it helps me change my mood and all over.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while doing other things because it helps me change my mood overall.

The phrase 'and all over' is incorrect. The appropriate adverb is 'overall' to mean 'in general' or 'completely.' Also keep simple present 'helps' for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'overall' at the end of the clause: 'it helps me change my mood overall.'

× I really love listening music.

✓ I really love listening to music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by its object. 'Listening music' is incorrect; use 'listening to music' or 'listening to songs.' Suggestion: memorize verb-preposition collocations like 'listen to.'