Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và mạch câu: tránh dùng các động từ sai thì và cấu trúc lặp; tổ chức câu rõ ràng (một câu chủ đề + 1-2 câu hỗ trợ). Thay cụm từ mơ hồ bằng chi tiết cụ thể về thể loại/ ví dụ. Ví dụ sửa lỗi thì: “made” -> “makes”; “leave me energetic” -> “keeps me energetic”.

예시: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel more positive and energetic. For example, I often listen to upbeat pop or electronic tracks when I study or go out, which helps me concentrate and lift my mood.

제안: Sửa lỗi phát âm/ ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ; dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, when, so). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về tình huống để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Chú ý thì động từ và dạng danh từ/động từ (e.g., “when I go out”).

예시: Yes, definitely. Happy music usually makes me feel more energetic and relaxed at the same time. For example, when I exercise or go out with friends, upbeat songs boost my mood and motivation.

제안: Cải thiện sự chính xác và liên kết logic: trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích ngắn gọn; tránh cụm từ mơ hồ như “on the show” nếu không rõ ràng. Nếu chưa học, có thể nói lý do hoặc kế hoạch trong tương lai. Sử dụng câu đơn, rõ ràng.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes. However, I enjoy listening to music at school events and on TV, and I find music a great way to relax. Maybe in the future I'll try a basic guitar or singing course.

제안: Giảm tiếng lắp và sửa ngữ pháp: dùng thì đúng (e.g., “when I study”), tránh lặp ý về thư giãn nhiều lần. Nên nêu 1-2 hoạt động chính và tác dụng cụ thể (tăng tập trung, giảm căng thẳng).

예시: Yes, I often listen to music when I study or exercise because it helps me concentrate and reduces stress. For instance, calm instrumental tracks help me focus while studying, while upbeat songs motivate me during workouts.

× And I prefer happy music because it made me feel more positive, moved and leave me energetic.

✓ And I prefer happy music because it makes me feel more positive, moved, and leaves me energetic.

The sentence mixes past tense 'made' with present 'prefer'. Use present simple 'makes' and 'leaves' to match habitual preference. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'leaves'. Suggestion: Use present simple for regular habits: 'it makes me feel... and leaves me energetic.'

× And I listen to beatbox songs when I study in or going out.

✓ And I listen to beatbox songs when I study or go out.

The clause 'going out' is a -ing form that mismatches 'when I study'. Use base form 'go' after 'when I' for parallel structure. Remove extraneous 'in'. Suggestion: Keep verbs parallel: 'when I study or go out.'

× Yes definitely a happy meeting, made me feel more energetic and even more energetic and make me feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, definitely happy music makes me feel more energetic and also relaxed.

Original mixes noun phrase 'a happy meeting' and past tense 'made' with present. Use present simple 'makes' for general statement. Simplify redundant phrase 'even more energetic' and correct 'make' to 'makes' for subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: Use present simple and concise phrasing: 'happy music makes me feel more energetic and relaxed.'

× I opt for listening to music when I going out or doing exercise.

✓ I opt to listen to music when I go out or exercise.

After 'I opt,' use infinitive 'to listen' or 'I choose listening' but keep consistent. 'When I going out' is incorrect; use 'when I go out' (base form). 'Doing exercise' can be simplified to 'exercise.' Suggestion: Use 'I opt to listen to music when I go out or exercise.'

× Now I haven't and never taken any music classes, but I enjoy listening to music on the show or even in school and acting.

✓ I have never taken any music classes, but I enjoy listening to music on shows or at school and in drama classes.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' to describe experience up to now. 'Now I haven't and never taken' is ungrammatical. 'On the show' should be 'on shows' or 'at shows'; 'acting' clarified to 'drama classes'. Suggestion: Use 'I have never taken any music classes, but I enjoy listening to music on shows or at school and in drama.'

× Music is a great way to relax.

✓ Music is a great way to relax.

This sentence is correct; present simple appropriately states a general truth. Suggestion: None needed.

× Uh yes I listen to music when I studying or doing exercise or going out be it make me feel more positive mood also relax.

✓ Uh yes, I listen to music when I study, exercise, or go out because it makes me feel more positive and relaxed.

'When I studying' should be 'when I study' (base form). Use parallel verbs 'study, exercise, or go out.' 'Be it make me' is ungrammatical; 'because it makes me' correctly introduces the reason and matches subject-verb agreement. 'Positive mood also relax' corrected to 'more positive and relaxed.' Suggestion: Use parallel verb forms and 'because it makes me...' for reasons.

× And uh, redu and it help me to reduce my stress.

✓ And it helps me reduce my stress.

'Redu' appears to be a misspelling. Combine ideas into one clear clause: 'it helps me reduce my stress.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it helps.' Suggestion: Remove filler 'uh' and use concise phrasing: 'It helps me reduce my stress.'