Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Melhore a clareza e a fluidez corrigindo erros gramaticais e evitando repetições. Use uma frase tópico clara, depois acrescente um ou dois detalhes específicos e coesivos com conectores simples. Por exemplo, corrija 'keep my live my mood quite lift' para 'lift my mood' e evite 'usually tend to' — escolha apenas um verbo modal. Mantenha no máximo cinco frases.

예시: It depends on my mood. When I'm feeling down, I prefer sad songs because they help me reflect and process my feelings. Conversely, when I'm energetic I choose happy music to lift my mood and keep me motivated.

제안: Torne a resposta mais direta e concreta: dê uma frase tópico clara, depois explique como e dê um exemplo específico e completo. Evite repetições como 'lyrics and the rhythm and also the beats' — agrupe como 'rhythm, lyrics and beat'. Complete exemplos terminando a frase (‘listen to upbeat music’).

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited. The upbeat rhythm, catchy lyrics and strong beat energise me, so I usually play upbeat songs before a date or when I meet friends to boost my mood.

제안: Organize em frases claras e corrija tempos verbais. Comece com uma frase direta sobre a experiência, depois explique porque desistiu e termine com um reflexo/arrependimento correto gramaticalmente. Evite formas incorretas como 'attend to piano lessons' (use 'attend piano lessons') e 'some much better' — diga 'much better'.

예시: I used to attend piano lessons as a child, but I didn't practise enough so I eventually gave them up. Looking back, I regret not being more focused, because if I had practised regularly I would be much better at playing now.

제안: Seja mais conciso e corrija vocabulário e ordem das palavras. Use uma frase tópico clara e depois dê exemplos concretos de actividades e tipos de música. Corrija 'list to choose carefully to upbeat it' para algo como 'choose upbeat songs carefully'. Mantenha até cinco frases.

예시: Definitely. I often listen to music while doing chores or studying because upbeat songs boost my energy and make time pass quickly. I usually choose energetic pop or electronic tracks to stay motivated.

× Well, I believe that it depends on my mood or the situation that I'm in.

✓ Well, I believe that it depends on my mood or the situation I'm in.

The sentence is grammatical but wordy; removing the extra 'that' and contraction of 'I am' improves fluency. Use present simple 'depends' to match general truth. Suggestion: eliminate unnecessary words for natural speech.

× If I'm feeling a little bit down or overwhelmed, I usually tend to prefer to listen to sad songs just to reflect and embrace my feeling.

✓ If I'm feeling a little bit down or overwhelmed, I usually prefer listening to sad songs just to reflect and embrace my feelings.

Use 'prefer' rather than 'tend to prefer' (redundant). After 'prefer' use gerund 'listening'. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' when referring to emotions in general. Suggestion: avoid redundant phrases and match verb patterns (prefer + -ing).

× But when I'm feeling very energetic, I like to listen to happy songs to keep my live my mood quite lift.

✓ But when I'm feeling very energetic, I like to listen to happy songs to keep my mood lifted.

'Live' is incorrect here. 'Keep my mood lifted' uses past participle as adjective. 'Quite lift' is ungrammatical; use 'lifted' or 'up'. Suggestion: use 'lifted' or 'to lift my mood' depending on structure.

× I believe that music has the power to uplift or bring us down.

✓ I believe that music has the power to uplift us or bring us down.

Parallel structure: include 'us' after 'uplift' to mirror 'bring us down'. Suggestion: maintain parallel objects for clarity.

× So when I'm listening to happy songs, I usually tend to feel more active and to get cheered up by the lyrics and the rhythm and also the beats.

✓ So when I'm listening to happy songs, I usually feel more energetic and get cheered up by the lyrics, rhythm, and beats.

Remove redundant 'tend to' and avoid mixing 'to' infinitive with simple verbs. Use 'feel more energetic' (adjective) and parallel list with commas. Suggestion: keep verb forms parallel and concise.

× So for example, when I have a date or a catch up, I like to listen to a bit.

✓ So for example, when I have a date or a catch-up, I like to listen to a bit of music.

'Catch up' as a noun should be hyphenated 'catch-up' and the sentence lacks an object after 'listen to a bit' — add 'of music'. Suggestion: ensure nouns are correctly formed and complete the object.

× When I was a child I used to attend to piano lessons but I was not that successful with those practices so that's why I gave up.

✓ When I was a child I used to attend piano lessons, but I wasn't very successful with the practice, so I gave up.

Do not use 'attend to' with 'lessons' — use 'attend piano lessons'. Use 'practice' rather than 'practices' for general activity. Simplify conjunctions and contractions. Suggestion: use correct verbs with 'attend' and singular 'practice' for general activity.

× But now I realize that if I had practiced more I would be some much better at music instruments right now.

✓ But now I realize that if I had practiced more I would be much better at musical instruments now.

'Some much' is incorrect; use 'much'. 'Music instruments' should be 'musical instruments'. The structure is third conditional referring to present result of past condition — 'if I had practiced more, I would be much better now' or 'I would be much better at playing musical instruments now.' Suggestion: correct quantifier and noun form, and clarify conditional result.

× So I regret it not being focused and dedicated with.

✓ So I regret not being focused and dedicated.

Sentence contains extraneous pronoun 'it' and unclear ending 'with'. Remove 'it' and 'with' to make sentence complete. Suggestion: use clear structure 'I regret not being X and Y.'

× Definitely, I believe that listening to songs while doing ordinary activities can boost your energy and also bring happiness to your brain.

✓ Definitely, I believe that listening to songs while doing everyday activities can boost your energy and bring happiness to your mind.

'Ordinary activities' is awkward; 'everyday activities' is more natural. 'Bring happiness to your brain' is awkward — use 'bring happiness to your mind'. Avoid redundant 'and also'. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations and avoid redundancy.

× So you have to list to choose carefully to upbeat it and energetic songs so it can give you a sense of the time is flying.

✓ So you have to choose upbeat and energetic songs carefully so they can give you a sense that time is flying.

'List to' is incorrect; should be 'choose'. Word order fixed: 'upbeat and energetic songs'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'songs'. 'Sense that time is flying' is correct clause. Suggestion: ensure correct verb choice, adjective order, and clause structure.