Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答をもっと自然で簡潔にし、発音のつまずきや不要なフィラー（uh, um）を減らすこと。冒頭で明確に結論を述べ（I prefer happy music.）、その後に具体的な理由と一つの具体例をつなぎの語（because, for example, so）で示してください。文は3文以内に収め、語彙は適切で文脈に合った単語（relaxではなくLAX）を使いましょう。

예시: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel relaxed and cheerful. For example, when I'm stressed after work, upbeat songs help me unwind and lift my mood.

제안: 簡潔に直接答えた後、理由と具体例を一貫した文でつなげてください。現在の回答は途切れが多く、文が完結していません。linking words（because, for example, so）を使い、聞き手が理解できるように一文で完結する説明を心がけましょう。曲名などを言う時は完全な文で述べてください。

예시: Yes, it does because upbeat songs increase my energy and motivation. For example, I often listen to ‘Beat It’ by Michael Jackson when I want to feel more energetic.

제안: 質問にはまず簡単に答え（Yes, I have.）、続けて授業で何をするかを一文で説明してください。現在の回答は断片的で重複があります。動詞の形や語順を正しくして、具体性（どんな授業か、どのくらいの頻度か）を付け加えると良いです。

예시: Yes, I have. In my music classes we usually listen to songs and practise singing together once a week. I also learn basic music theory and vocal techniques.

제안: 理由を明確にし、単語の選び方を改善してください（motivate it → motivate me、approved my mood → improves my mood）。同じ内容を繰り返さず、接続詞（because, so, for example）で一貫性のある短い文を作ってください。

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks because it motivates me and improves my mood. For example, I usually play Michael Jackson's songs when studying or cleaning to stay focused and cheerful.

× I like happy music because, uh, when I listen listening to it, I feel very comfortable.

✓ I like happy music because, when I listen to it, I feel very comfortable.

You used both 'listen' and 'listening' together; the correct structure is 'listen to' followed by the object. Use the base verb + to with the object: 'listen to it'. Remove the extra gerund to make the sentence grammatically correct. You can improve by practicing verb patterns: 'listen to + noun'.

× For example, you can LAX with.

✓ For example, you can relax with it.

'LAX' is not a proper verb in normal writing; likely intended 'relax'. Also the phrase needs an object, such as 'it' (meaning the music). Correct sentence: 'you can relax with it.' To improve, use complete verbs and include necessary objects.

× Yes it does, because it makes you. Encouraged, for example.

✓ Yes, it does, because it encourages you, for example.

The original has incorrect punctuation and split sentence fragments. 'Makes you encouraged' is awkward; use the verb 'encourage' with the object: 'encourages you'. Combine fragments into one sentence and place commas correctly.

× I usually. Listen to Beat it when I.

✓ I usually listen to 'Beat It' when I am sad.

The original is fragmented: 'I usually.' and 'Listen to Beat it when I.' are incomplete. Provide a full clause for the time or condition ('when I am sad') and keep the verb with its subject: 'I usually listen to Beat It.' Also capitalize song title properly. To improve, avoid splitting subject and verb and finish time clauses.

× Yes, I have. Uh. I usually. Listen to music and sing it while taking music class.

✓ Yes, I have. I usually listen to music and sing while taking a music class.

Fragments and punctuation errors break the sentence. Use continuous clause: 'listen to music and sing' (no 'it' needed after 'sing'). Add article 'a' before 'music class'. Keep verbs in simple present for habitual actions. Improve by writing full clauses and using appropriate articles.

× My music class.

✓ My music class is enjoyable.

'My music class.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Add a verb and complement to form a complete sentence, e.g. 'My music class is enjoyable.' Practice making subject-verb complete sentences.

× I often listen to music while doing something because I can motivate it to do anything I do.

✓ I often listen to music while doing other things because it motivates me to do what I need to do.

'Doing something' is vague; 'doing other things' fits context. 'Motivate it to do anything I do' is incorrect: music does not perform actions; it motivates me. Use correct object pronoun 'me' and phrasing 'motivates me to...' Also 'what I need to do' clarifies purpose.

× For example, I usually listen to Michael Jackson's music because it approved my mood mood.

✓ For example, I usually listen to Michael Jackson's music because it improves my mood.

'Approved' is wrong verb; intended 'improves'. Also 'mood mood' is repeated. Use present tense 'improves' for habitual effect. To improve, choose the correct verb for changing mood and avoid repetition.