Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more fluent and concise, avoid fillers (uh), use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words. Mention specific examples of genres or situations to be more precise.

예시: It depends on my mood. When I feel energetic, I prefer loud upbeat music like pop or rock because it boosts my energy; however, when I want to relax I choose soulful or romantic songs to calm down.

제안: Correct grammar (subject–verb agreement and verb forms) and tighten the structure: give a direct answer, a reason, and a brief example using linking words. Replace vague phrases with specific effects.

예시: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because it lifts my mood and energises me; for example, I often play upbeat tracks while exercising to stay motivated.

제안: Use a clear timeline and correct tense. Avoid repetition and fillers. State when you started, what you learned, and give one specific detail about the teacher or outcome. Use linking words to connect ideas coherently.

예시: Yes. I became interested in singing as a child, and I began formal vocal training in tenth grade with Ms. Gurmeet Kaur, who focused on breathing and pitch; after that I trained as a harmonist and performed in school events.

제안: Make the negative response concise and correct grammar (avoid repetition, use correct verb forms). Provide a brief reason and, if possible, an exception using linking words for coherence.

예시: No, I usually avoid listening to music while working because it distracts me and reduces my focus; however, I might play instrumental music when doing repetitive tasks.

× When I feel energetic, then I prefer to listen some, uh, loud music.

✓ When I feel energetic, I prefer to listen to loud music.

Use the verb 'listen' with the preposition 'to' when followed by an object: 'listen to music'. Also remove unnecessary 'then' and 'some' before uncountable 'music' to make the sentence natural.

× But when I feel, uh, to listen some, uh, soulful music, uh, then I just play some romantic songs.

✓ But when I feel like listening to soulful music, I just play romantic songs.

Use the pattern 'feel like' + verb-ing (listening). Also use 'listen to' and avoid 'some' before plural 'songs' when context is general; remove filler 'then' for fluency.

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited because it gets motivated and give me a positive energy and sometime when I work then I play of some energetic songs.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it motivates me and gives me positive energy, and sometimes when I work I play some energetic songs.

Subject 'happy music' is singular/collective, so use 'makes'. 'It gets motivated' is incorrect: music cannot be motivated; use 'motivates me'. Use 'gives' to agree with singular subject. Use 'sometimes' and correct 'play of some' to 'play some'.

× Yes, since I since my childhood, I was very interested to take on a vocal classes.

✓ Yes, since my childhood, I have been very interested in taking vocal classes.

With 'since' and a time from the past to present, use present perfect ('have been'). Use 'interested in doing' and 'taking' (gerund). Use plural 'vocal classes' without 'a' and remove extra 'since'.

× However, in my 10th standard, I started to take a vocal training, uh, from Mr. Gurmeet Kaur.

✓ However, in my 10th standard, I started vocal training with Mr. Gurmeet Kaur.

Use 'started' + noun phrase 'vocal training' or 'started to take vocal training' (less natural). Use 'with' for the teacher rather than 'from'. Avoid article 'a' before uncountable 'training'.

× She is a very good teacher and a vocal trainer.

✓ She is a very good teacher and vocal trainer.

This sentence is grammatical but more natural without the second article. Removing 'a' before 'vocal trainer' avoids redundancy.

× Uh, after that I joined as a harmonist.

✓ After that, I joined as a harmonist.

Remove filler 'Uh' and add a comma. 'Joined as a harmonist' is acceptable; ensure context clarifies what was joined (a group or as a role). If intended 'I became a harmonist', use that phrasing.

× No, I do not prefer to listen listen music while I while I am doing other things because I want to concentrate on a single thing and when I listen to music I do not fully focused or concentrate in other thing.

✓ No, I do not prefer to listen to music while I am doing other things because I want to concentrate on one thing, and when I listen to music I am not fully focused on other things.

Use 'listen to music'. Remove repeated words. Use 'concentrate on one thing' rather than 'a single thing' for naturalness. Use 'am not fully focused' (correct verb form) and plural 'other things' to match context.