Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Trình bày câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn (ví dụ: "I prefer happy music"), sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể và tránh lặp từ/cấu trúc. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, however). Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu và sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (ví dụ: động từ chia, mạo từ, trật tự từ).

예시: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and cheerful. For example, upbeat songs help me wake up and improve my mood in the morning. However, I sometimes listen to slow songs when I need to relax.

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh tiếng ồn (uh) và câu rời rạc. Sử dụng thì đúng (present simple) và liên từ để liên kết lý do và ví dụ. Hạn chế lặp từ và nói ngắn gọn dưới 5 câu.

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because its fast rhythm makes people want to dance. For instance, at parties my friends and I usually sing along and dance to upbeat pop songs, which creates a lively atmosphere.

제안: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và chính xác câu hỏi: nếu có học lớp nhạc hay không, nêu thời điểm và nội dung học. Tránh nhầm lẫn giữa "English class" và "music class"; sửa cấu trúc câu và dùng từ phù hợp (learn/take dance/music class). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về loại lớp, tần suất hoặc một hoạt động đã làm.

예시: Yes, I took a basic dance class when I was a child where we learned simple folk dances. One of my favorite lessons was the polka, and we practiced the steps every week for two months.

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi nói rõ hoàn cảnh cụ thể khi nghe nhạc và khi không nghe. Sử dụng thì hợp lý (past vs present) và tránh lặp từ, ngắt câu đúng chỗ. Giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao bạn làm như vậy (e.g. helps concentration, relaxes me).

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while studying or commuting because it helps me concentrate. When I was younger I sometimes listened to songs in English class, but now my mother prefers I focus on studying English without music.

× Yes, because happy music make me excited and sad music don't make me happy.

✓ Yes, because happy music makes me excited and sad music doesn't make me happy.

Use third person singular form 'makes' and 'doesn't' because the subjects 'happy music' and 'sad music' are singular nouns; in Present Simple third person singular verbs need -s. Suggestion: learn third person singular conjugation and apply with nouns that are singular or treated as a single category.

× Because sad music is make me sad.

✓ Because sad music makes me sad.

Remove the extra verb 'is' and use 'makes' for third person singular. The error comes from using 'is' plus base verb incorrectly. Suggestion: use one main verb for the clause and conjugate it correctly in Present Simple.

× Because sad music is terrible.

✓ Because sad music is terrible.

This sentence is grammatically correct but fragmentary as a response. To improve, combine with the previous sentence for clarity: 'I don't like sad music because it makes me sad and is terrible.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments when explaining reasons.

× When I dream music I will be so so excited but.

✓ When I hear music in my dreams I am very excited.

Original has wrong verb 'dream' and awkward modal 'will be' plus trailing 'but'. Use 'hear music in my dreams' and Present Simple or Present Continuous for habitual/experienced feelings: 'I am very excited.' Suggestion: use correct verbs (hear, dream) and complete the clause.

× Yes, happy music make me excited because when I in a party, my friend activate uh, I don't know, so I, I cannot talk about uh.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me excited because when I am at a party my friends get active and I can't talk much.

Use third person singular 'makes' for 'happy music'. Use correct verb 'am' for 'I am at a party'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring to several; 'activate' is incorrect—use 'get active' or 'become active'. 'Cannot talk much' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and choose correct verbs and prepositions for situations.

× Only happy music.

✓ Only happy music does.

As a short answer, use a verb to complete meaning: 'Only happy music does.' Original fragment lacks verb and is incomplete. Suggestion: use short clauses with auxiliary when omitting the verb for clarity.

× So my friend, just sing.

✓ So my friends just sing.

Use plural 'friends' to match context and remove comma. 'Sing' is fine for present simple habit. Suggestion: ensure pronoun/noun number matches intended meaning.

× Yes, when I go to English class, my teacher will teach me how to dance about my song Polka dance because Polka 10 is my favorite song.

✓ Yes, when I went to English class, my teacher taught me how to do the Polka because 'Polka 10' was my favorite song.

Use past tense 'went' and 'taught' because the action is in the past. 'How to do the Polka' is more natural than 'dance about my song Polka dance.' Suggestion: match tense to the time reference and use natural collocations: 'do the Polka', 'favorite song.'

× Do you listen to music while doing other things? I listen to music when I go to English class, when I still stage one, but when I grow up mom have have to teach me how to do English not music.

✓ I listen to music when I go to English class, when I was in stage one, but when I grew up my mom had to teach me English, not music.

Mix of tenses and repeated 'have have'. Use past tense 'was'/'was in stage one' and 'grew up' for past events; 'mom had to teach me' is past obligation. Also remove extra 'have'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events, avoid duplicated words, and place commas correctly.

× Yes, when I go to English class, my teacher will teach me how to dance about my song Polka dance because Polka 10 is my favorite song.

✓ Yes, when I went to English class, my teacher taught me how to do the Polka because 'Polka 10' was my favorite song.

Preposition 'about' is incorrect here; use 'do' or 'dance the Polka'. Also use past tense 'went/taught' for past context. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations for activities (e.g., 'dance the Polka', 'do the Polka').