Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, choose precise vocabulary, and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, replace incorrect words ("E", "lithium") and remove hesitations ("uh").

예시: I prefer happy music because it relaxes me and boosts my energy. For example, when I'm cleaning my room or jogging, upbeat songs keep me motivated and help me work or run more efficiently.

제안: Good direct answer and example—improve grammar and conciseness, and vary vocabulary. Use one linking phrase and correct uncountable nouns ("energy" not "energies"). Keep to maximum five sentences.

예시: Yes, it does. For example, when I'm jogging, upbeat songs boost my energy and motivate me to run faster, so I usually keep a lively playlist for workouts.

제안: Use correct tense and accurate vocabulary, answer directly, and give a brief reason with supporting detail. Avoid incorrect words ("paying instruments", "pinochle") and repetition. Keep to one topic sentence plus one supporting sentence.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I don't feel confident playing instruments. However, I enjoy listening to acoustic and upbeat songs, and I might take beginner guitar lessons in the future.

제안: Answer directly, fix grammar and word choice, and be specific about how music helps you. Use a linking word to connect the activities and effect.

예시: Yes, I usually listen to music when I'm cleaning or jogging because it gives me energy and motivates me to work or exercise more quickly.

× I prefer happy music because as E helps me relax and boost my energy, especially when I'm cleaning my room and jogging because, uh, upbeat lithium keep me motivated.

✓ I prefer happy music because it helps me relax and boost my energy, especially when I'm cleaning my room or jogging, because upbeat music keeps me motivated.

Multiple mistakes: 'as E' appears to be a typo and should be 'it' (pronoun reference) — this is Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and a typo. 'lithium' is a wrong word; context requires 'music' (word choice error, treated here as incorrect pronoun/word). 'keep' should be 'keeps' to agree with the singular noun 'music' (Third person singular issue, ID 2). Use 'or' instead of repeated 'and'/'because' for clarity and avoid run-on sentence (Sentence structure error, ID 26). Suggestion: use clear pronoun references (it), correct word choice (music), ensure subject-verb agreement (music keeps), and simplify sentence connectors.

× Happy music definitely makes me feel more excited, for example when I'm jogging because of the upbeat songs boost my energies and motivate me to run faster.

✓ Happy music definitely makes me feel more excited, for example when I'm jogging, because the upbeat songs boost my energy and motivate me to run faster.

Problems: missing article 'the' before 'upbeat songs' can be optional but 'the' clarifies (Article error, ID 22). 'Boost my energies' is unnatural; 'energy' is an uncountable noun so use singular (Incorrect use of quantifiers/adjectives, IDs 14 and 13). The original sentence had punctuation issues (Sentence structure error, ID 26). Suggestion: use 'energy' (uncountable), add a comma before 'because' for clarity, and include 'the' if referring to specific songs.

× I never taken any music classes because I don't think I have a talent for paying instruments.

✓ I have never taken any music classes because I don't think I have a talent for playing instruments.

Error: 'I never taken' is missing the auxiliary 'have' for present perfect tense; correct form is 'I have never taken' (Past tense issue / Present perfect construction, ID 5). 'Paying instruments' is a typo; correct verb is 'playing' (word choice/typo, treated under Incorrect use of verbs, ID 26). Suggestion: use present perfect 'have never taken' to describe life experience and use correct verb 'play'.

× I do enjoy listening to music a lot, especially like acoustic or happy songs, but I haven't learned the guitar or pinochle so I haven't.

✓ I do enjoy listening to music a lot, especially acoustic or happy songs, but I haven't learned the guitar or piano.

Issues: 'especially like acoustic' is redundant; use either 'especially' or 'like' (Incorrect conjunction/structure, IDs 16 and 26). 'pinochle' is the name of a card game; likely intended 'piano' (wrong word choice/typo). The trailing 'so I haven't' is incomplete and unnecessary (Sentence without a verb/structure error, IDs 23 and 26). Suggestion: remove redundancy, correct 'piano', and finish the thought succinctly.

× Yes I do, I usually listen to music when I'm cleaning or jogging because it's give me energies and motivates me to work faster.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually listen to music when I'm cleaning or jogging because it gives me energy and motivates me to work faster.

Errors: punctuation/run-on sentence (Sentence structure error, ID 26) — split into two sentences. 'it's give' should be 'it gives' (Third person singular issue, ID 2). 'energies' is incorrect; 'energy' is uncountable singular (Incorrect use of quantifiers/adjectives, ID 13/14). Suggestion: use correct verb form 'gives', uncountable 'energy', and proper sentence separation with commas or periods.