Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, coherent answer and include a brief reason. Keep it to 1–3 sentences, use correct grammar and natural phrasing. For example, start with a clear topic sentence saying which type you prefer, then add one short reason. Avoid contradictory fragments (e.g. “not OK” then “I’m happy”) unless you explain the contrast.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me forget stress. For instance, when I feel tired or worried, upbeat songs make me feel more energetic and positive.

제안: Answer directly and expand with a specific example and a linking word to connect ideas. Use correct tense and natural collocations (e.g. “listen to music”, “while I’m cleaning”). Keep to 1–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because I tend to move and dance along to the beat. For example, while I’m cleaning the house I turn on lively songs and find myself dancing between chores.

제안: This answer is off-topic. Directly answer whether you have taken music classes (yes/no) and provide a brief supporting detail. If you haven't, explain how you learn music (e.g. apps, YouTube, self-taught) using correct phrases and one linking word.

예시: No, I haven’t taken formal music classes, but I learn songs online using apps and YouTube tutorials. For instance, I practice singing along with videos on my phone when I have free time.

제안: Answer directly, give clear examples of activities and use correct phrases (e.g. “I listen to music while I sleep”, “while I’m cleaning”). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid fragments. Keep it concise and specific.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I usually play calming music at night to help me sleep, and I put on upbeat playlists while I’m cleaning the house.

× Actually now I'm not OK, but I'm listening music. I'm happy.

✓ Actually, I'm not OK right now, but I'm listening to music. I'm happy.

The sentence uses present continuous but has word order and preposition errors. 'Now' should be 'right now' after subject or with comma. 'Listening music' is incorrect because English requires the preposition 'to' after 'listen'. Suggestion: use 'I'm listening to music' and place 'right now' near the verb for clarity.

× Yeah, because I love music. Even I'm cleaning the house, I'm listening music and dancing.

✓ Yeah, because I love music. Even when I'm cleaning the house, I'm listening to music and dancing.

Missing subordinating word and incorrect use of preposition. Use 'when' to introduce the time clause: 'Even when I'm cleaning...'. Also 'listening music' requires 'to'. The progressive 'I'm cleaning' is fine. Suggestion: say 'Even when I'm cleaning the house, I'm listening to music and dancing.'

× Yeah, I have two uses like phone and open the TV while I'm cleaning.

✓ Yeah, I use two devices, like my phone and the TV, while I'm cleaning.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Have two uses' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'use two devices'. Add articles and possessive where needed: 'my phone' and use 'the TV' or 'a TV'. Maintain present simple 'I use' for habitual actions. Suggestion: 'I use two devices, like my phone and the TV, while I'm cleaning.'

× Yeah, because I love music. Every I sleep I play the phone music and. Eben Cleaning.

✓ Yeah, because I love music. Whenever I sleep, I play music on my phone, even when I'm cleaning.

Multiple issues: 'Every I sleep' is incorrect time expression; use 'Whenever I sleep' or 'Every time I sleep'. 'Play the phone music' is awkward—say 'play music on my phone'. 'Eben Cleaning' is likely 'even cleaning' and needs correct clause: 'even when I'm cleaning.' Use present simple 'I play' for habitual action and present continuous for 'I'm cleaning.' Suggestion: 'Whenever I sleep, I play music on my phone, even when I'm cleaning.'