Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'helps me express' and 'also help me regulate' are repetitive) and finish the sentence about happy music. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and phrasing (e.g., 'an instrument', 'I don't want').

예시: I prefer both sad and happy music depending on my mood. For example, when I'm feeling low I listen to mellow songs because they help me process my emotions and calm down. Conversely, when I'm energetic I choose upbeat tunes to boost my motivation and focus.

제안: Combine short repetitive sentences into a coherent response and use linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'therefore'). Correct small errors ('up on track' -> 'on track'; 'a happy music' -> 'happy music'). Limit to 3–4 sentences and include a specific brief example with a result.

예시: Yes — happy music definitely energizes and motivates me. For example, when I go running I play upbeat songs, so I feel more energetic and stay on track with my pace. Therefore, happy music helps me reach my exercise goals.

제안: Use correct tense and articles ('I had a music class', 'an instrument'), avoid informal contractions like 'wanna' in IELTS. Structure reply: direct answer, brief past detail with linking word, then current position. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and give a concise reason why you won't take classes now.

예시: No, I haven't taken music classes professionally. However, I had a music class in grade school where I learned to play the piano, although I was not very skilled. Currently I do not want to pursue lessons because my main interest is listening to music rather than performing.

제안: This is a good, concise answer. To improve, add a linking phrase and one specific brief example of when it helped you, and avoid slightly vague phrasing like 'has helped me get through difficult times' without detail. Keep sentences varied and precise.

예시: Yes, I often listen to upbeat pop or acoustic music while doing chores or brisk walks because it lifts my mood. For example, during a stressful exam week, listening to calming acoustic songs helped me stay focused and reduce anxiety.

× When I am sad, of course I would like to listen to very mellow songs because it also helps me express my emotions even more and also help me regulate my emotions.

✓ When I am sad, of course I like to listen to very mellow songs because they help me express and regulate my emotions.

The original mixes conditional/modal 'would like' with a general present habit; use simple present 'like' for habitual actions. Also subject-verb agreement: 'songs' is plural so use 'help' not 'helps'. Redundant phrasing 'express my emotions even more and also help me regulate my emotions' is tightened to 'help me express and regulate my emotions'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual preferences and ensure verb agrees with plural subject.

× On the other hand, I like to listen to happy music when I am happy, when I want to do things that.

✓ On the other hand, I like to listen to happy music when I am happy or when I want to get things done.

The original ends with an incomplete clause 'when I want to do things that' which is a sentence structure error (incomplete/fragment). Replace with a complete phrase such as 'when I want to get things done' or 'when I want to be productive'. Suggestion: always finish subordinate clauses and choose a clear verb phrase.

× I feel more upbeat and up on track when I'm listening to very happy songs, and because of that, I feel like I can reach my goal by just listening to a happy music.

✓ I feel more upbeat and on track when I'm listening to very happy songs, and because of that I feel like I can reach my goals by just listening to happy music.

Several issues: 'up on track' is incorrect — use 'on track'. 'a happy music' is wrong because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'a'; use 'happy music' or 'a happy song'. Also use plural 'goals' if referring generally. Suggestion: remove incorrect article with uncountable nouns and use correct idiomatic phrases.

× I haven't taken any music classes professionally, but when I was in grade school, I have a music class wherein we need to play a instrument of choice.

✓ I haven't taken any music classes professionally, but when I was in grade school I had a music class where we had to play an instrument of our choice.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was in grade school' refers to past, so follow with past tense 'had' not present 'have'. Also 'need to play' should be 'had to play' to match past; 'a instrument' is incorrect article before a vowel sound — use 'an instrument'; 'wherein' is formal/awkward; use 'where'. Suggestion: keep past-time clauses in past tense and correct articles ('an').

× I played the piano, however, I'm not good at it but I tried my best.

✓ I played the piano; however, I wasn't very good at it, but I tried my best.

Tense mismatch: 'played' and 'tried' are past, so assessment 'I'm not good at it' should be past 'I wasn't very good at it'. Also punctuation: use semicolon or separate sentences for contrasting clause. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when describing past abilities and events.

× But currently, I don't wanna take any music classes.

✓ But currently, I don't want to take any music classes.

'wanna' is informal spoken contraction not appropriate for formal writing; replace with 'want to'. Modal/auxiliary 'don't want to' is correct. Suggestion: use 'want to' in formal responses and avoid colloquial slang.

× For example, when I want to go for a run or for a walk.

✓ For example, when I want to go for a run or a walk, I listen to upbeat music.

The original is a sentence fragment ending after a subordinate clause; to fix structure add main clause or rephrase. Also unnecessary repeated 'for': 'for a run or a walk' or simply 'go for a run or a walk'. Suggestion: complete the thought by adding the result clause.

× because it helps me regulate my emotions and has helped me get through difficult times.

✓ because it helps me regulate my emotions and has helped me get through difficult times.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article error. No correction needed. Explanation: 'music' as an uncountable noun was correctly used without an article; verb tenses 'helps' (present) and 'has helped' (present perfect) are acceptable here because one refers to general effect and one to past experiences with present relevance. Suggestion: keep as is.