Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid clichéd phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one specific reason or example. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “uplifting” or “cheerful”) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and motivates me. For example, I often play upbeat pop or electronic tracks in the morning to feel energized before work.

제안: Avoid repetition and tighten the response. Give a direct answer followed by a brief, specific explanation and a linking word. Use precise adjectives and one short example of how it affects you.

예시: Yes, it definitely does because upbeat rhythms and major keys boost my energy. For instance, when I listen to lively songs while exercising, I can work out harder and longer.

제안: Be careful with negative phrasing like “not looking forward to it” which can sound odd here. Give a direct answer and a concise reason. If you want, mention other ways you engage with music to enrich the response.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal music classes because I don't feel confident about singing or composing. However, I enjoy learning songs by ear and watching online tutorials to improve my listening skills.

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear statement about your habit, then give one specific context and a brief reason. Use linking words like “because” or “so” for coherence.

예시: No, I usually don't because I get easily distracted by music. For example, when I'm studying for exams I prefer silence so I can concentrate on reading and problem-solving.

× I am a type of guy who loves to live life to the fullest, so I always try to listen to music that makes me feel happy and alive.

✓ I am the type of guy who loves to live life to the fullest, so I always try to listen to music that makes me feel happy and alive.

Use 'the type' rather than 'a type' when describing a personal identity or habitual characteristic; 'the type of person' is the natural collocation. Also 'guy' is fine informally; no other grammatical changes needed.

× There's just this enthusiasm that makes me feel excited and alive and even energetic whenever I try to listen to happy music that makes me, that makes me excited.

✓ There is just this enthusiasm that makes me feel excited, alive, and even energetic whenever I listen to happy music that makes me excited.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' which is acceptable; main issues are repetition and awkward verb form 'try to listen' which is unnecessary. Use simple present 'I listen' for habitual action. Also remove the repeated phrase 'that makes me' to avoid redundancy and add commas for clarity.

× Unfortunately, I haven't and I'm not looking forward to it.

✓ Unfortunately, I haven't, and I'm not looking forward to taking any.

Sentence lacks clarity because 'haven't' is missing an object. In context question was 'Have you taken any music classes?' so 'I haven't' should be followed by the noun phrase 'taken any' or 'taken any music classes'. Adding 'taking any' or 'taken any music classes' completes the modal/auxiliary construction.

× As much as I love music, I know my capabilities well and I am not that gifted when it comes to singing or even writing songs.

✓ As much as I love music, I know my capabilities well, and I am not very gifted when it comes to singing or even writing songs.

'not that gifted' is informal but acceptable; replaced with 'not very gifted' for smoother register. No major grammatical error but improved adjective/adverb use for clarity.

× I am a type of a person who is easily distracted when there is a noise or even unnecessary sounds in my surroundings when I'm trying to do specific tests.

✓ I am the type of person who is easily distracted when there is noise or unnecessary sounds in my surroundings when I'm trying to do specific tasks.

Use 'the type of person' not 'a type of a person'. Also 'noise' uncountable fits better than 'a noise' here; 'specific tests' likely intended 'specific tasks' or 'tests' depending on context—'tasks' is more general. This fixes article and word choice errors.

× So I don't enjoy listening to songs or music, say for example when I'm studying for a certain examination.

✓ So I don't enjoy listening to songs or music, for example, when I'm studying for an examination.

Minor style and punctuation issues: remove 'say' and 'certain' unless needed; place 'for example' set off by commas. Tense 'I'm studying' is correct present continuous for an ongoing habit; clarified phrasing for fluency.