Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and clear: state preference (sad or happy) in first sentence, then give concise specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "some music" and fix sentence structure (e.g., "its beautiful melody and length"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer sad music, especially Chinese ballads. Their smooth melodies and slow pace help me relax and let me reflect, so they often transport me into a different emotional world.

제안: Answer directly (Yes or No) then explain with a clear reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic because of its upbeat rhythm and lively instruments. For example, when I listen to upbeat pop songs before exercising, I feel more motivated and focused.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer (No, I haven't). Then expand with specific relevant details: how you learn about music, which programs you watch, and any plans for classes. Use correct tense and coherent linking words.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal music classes yet. Instead, I learn by watching music TV shows such as Good Show and studying performances online, and I hope to take voice lessons next year to improve my singing.

제안: Give a direct answer and then explain both situations with clear sentences and examples. Use linking words ("sometimes", "however") and correct grammar. Avoid numbering unless brief and simple; prefer two concise sentences.

예시: Sometimes I do and sometimes I don't. For example, I listen to soft instrumental music while tidying my room because it helps me concentrate, but I avoid music when I do difficult homework because it distracts me.

× Actually, I prefer some music because of its smooth melody, you know, especially Chinese songs.

✓ Actually, I prefer certain kinds of music because of their smooth melodies, especially Chinese songs.

The original uses 'some music' (unclear) and mixes singular/plural agreement: 'its smooth melody' refers to music singularly but 'Chinese songs' is plural. Change to 'certain kinds of music' and 'their smooth melodies' to match plurality and use a more natural collocation. Suggestion: Use clear quantifiers (certain kinds of, some kinds of) and maintain agreement between noun and pronoun/adjective forms.

× It's beautiful melody and lengthy can take me into a new world.

✓ Their beautiful melodies and length can take me into a new world.

The sentence has agreement and word choice issues: 'It's' (it is) is incorrect for plural 'songs'; 'beautiful' should modify plural 'melodies'; 'lengthy' is an adjective that doesn't fit as a noun; use 'length' or 'long duration'. Also change 'can' placement to make the subject clear. Suggestion: Match number (their melodies) and use appropriate noun forms (length or long duration).

× The active and happy music exactly helped me to to inspire, inspire my spirit.

✓ Active and happy music exactly helps to inspire my spirit.

Tense and subject-verb agreement are inconsistent. The original uses past 'helped' while the general statement about music's effect should be present simple 'helps'. Also remove duplicate 'to' and duplicate 'inspire'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual/general truths and ensure singular/plural verb agreement.

× I often watch music, TV and programs like Good Show.

✓ I often watch music TV programs like Good Show.

The phrase 'watch music, TV and programs' is awkward and redundant. 'Music TV programs' or 'music and TV programs' is clearer. No -ing correction needed here; main issue is word order and collocation. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases: 'music TV programs' or 'music and TV programs.'

× I will. I would admire their voice.

✓ I will. I admire their voices.

The modal sequence is confusing: 'I will' is vague and 'I would admire their voice' mixes conditional 'would' with a general statement. Use present simple for a general liking: 'I admire their voices.' Also match plural 'voices' to 'their.' Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual attitudes; avoid unnecessary conditionals.

× I think it's divided 2 aspects.

✓ I think it can be divided into two aspects.

The original lacks proper preposition and number words: 'divided 2 aspects' needs 'divided into two aspects.' Spell out numbers in formal speech and include 'can be' for modality if intended. Suggestion: Use 'divided into' and write numbers appropriately ('two').

× 1 is when I do homework or doing do some careful things I need to avoid other disturb me understand.

✓ One is when I do homework or need to do careful tasks; I need to avoid other distractions so I can concentrate and understand.

Multiple problems: inconsistent verb forms ('do homework or doing do'), missing articles and prepositions, incorrect noun 'other' used for 'other people' or 'other distractions', and unclear clause 'disturb me understand.' Correct to parallel structure and clear purpose: avoid distractions so I can concentrate/understand. Suggestion: Use parallel verb forms, include appropriate nouns ('distractions' or 'people'), and use purpose clauses ('so I can concentrate' or 'so I can understand').