Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer does not address the question. You should state your preference directly (sad or happy), then give 1–2 brief reasons. Keep it natural and coherent, using linking words if adding details. Avoid unrelated mentions of taking classes.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me concentrate. For example, I often play upbeat songs when I'm cleaning or exercising, since they keep my energy levels high.

제안: This answer is somewhat relevant but disjointed and contains unclear phrases and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no), then give 1–2 concrete examples of how happy music affects you, using linking words (for example, therefore). Keep sentences concise and avoid fragmented phrases.

예시: Yes, happy music does make me more excited. For example, when I listen to upbeat pop songs I often start tapping my feet and dancing, which boosts my energy and improves my mood.

제안: This response is mostly relevant and directly answers the question. Improve by making sentences smoother and more concise, adding a reason and a short plan. Remove filler words (uh) and repetition.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would like to in the future because I enjoy singing and want to improve my technique. If possible, I plan to join a local singing workshop next year.

제안: The answer is relevant but contains many errors and unclear parts. Begin with a clear statement (yes/no), then give a specific example of an activity when you do listen to music and explain why. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid unclear phrases.

예시: Not often at the moment because I'm very busy, but I used to listen to music while doing homework. For example, when I did maths homework I played instrumental music because it made studying less stressful and helped me focus.

× No, I have never taken any music classes but I wanted to take fun if I ever. Come across an opportunity and take in the near future.

✓ No, I have never taken any music classes, but I would like to take some for fun if I ever come across an opportunity in the near future.

The original has fragmented clauses and incorrect tense/modal use. Change 'wanted' to 'would like' (polite desire) and 'if I ever. Come across' to 'if I ever come across' to form one conditional clause. Add 'some for fun' to clarify 'take' what. Use commas to connect clauses properly.

× I usually listen to sad songs by Chirp Yoshi.

✓ I usually listen to sad songs by Chirp Yoshi.

This sentence is already correct in present simple to describe habitual action; no change needed.

× Karate music is also my favorite genre but it depends on my mood.

✓ 'Karate' is also my favorite music genre, but it depends on my mood.

The phrase 'Karate music' is unusual; if referring to the genre 'karate' is likely misplaced. Clarify by saying 'Karate is also my favorite music genre' or name the actual genre. Added commas for clarity.

× Whenever I feel like listening to happy music, it is a very good experience and it always makes me. Cheerful, and it always makes me excited.

✓ Whenever I feel like listening to happy music, it is a very good experience and it always makes me cheerful and excited.

Original contains sentence fragments and misplaced periods. Combine fragments into one coherent sentence and use adjectives 'cheerful and excited' to describe feelings.

× I'm jumping, dancing, especially whenever I'm gone.

✓ I jump and dance, especially when I'm free or when I have time.

'Whenever I'm gone' is unclear and likely incorrect. Replace with 'when I'm free' or 'when I have time' to convey intended meaning. Use simple present to describe habitual reaction.

× No, I have never had any opportunity of taking music classes, but I would love to do so if I ever come across an opportunity like this.

✓ No, I have never had the opportunity to take music classes, but I would love to do so if I ever come across one.

Use 'the opportunity' or 'an opportunity' and the infinitive 'to take' instead of 'of taking'. Replace repeated phrase 'opportunity like this' with 'one' for conciseness.

× I love listening to music as well as I love to sing songs.

✓ I love listening to music and I also love singing.

Reduce redundancy: 'love to sing songs' is repetitive. Use parallel structure 'love listening ... and I also love singing'.

× My I love my voice and I always, uh, sing songs.

✓ I love my voice and I always sing songs.

Remove stray 'My' and filler 'uh' for grammatical correctness. Keep simple present for habitual action.

× I don't usually listen to music these days as I am very busy uh, but when I was asked to rent a lot, listening to music while I while doing my hats homework because maths was always kind of subject for me and music makes it more exciting.

✓ I don't usually listen to music these days because I am very busy, but when I used to study a lot, I would listen to music while doing my maths homework because maths has always been a difficult subject for me and music makes it more enjoyable.

Original has many errors: tense and word choice. Replace 'when I was asked to rent a lot' with 'when I used to study a lot'. Use 'would listen' or 'I listened' for habitual past. 'hats homework' is nonsense -> 'maths homework'. Use 'difficult subject' instead of 'kind of subject' and 'enjoyable' instead of 'exciting' for clarity.