Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., “lift my mood” not “live my mood”).

예시: I prefer happy music because it relaxes me and lifts my mood. For example, I often listen to K-pop and rap, and their upbeat rhythms make me want to dance, which helps me feel more energetic.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same point. Use correct tense and clearer linking words (e.g., “However, when I’m sad…”). Give a specific example of when happy music helped you and explain briefly how it affected your feelings.

예시: Yes, happy music often makes me feel more excited and less down. For instance, when I’m unhappy after a stressful day, I play an upbeat K-pop playlist and within a few songs I feel calmer and more positive because the tempo distracts me and boosts my energy.

제안: Good structure and clarity. Improve by adding a linking word and a specific detail about what you learned or how often you practise to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I have. I attended a singing class for two years because I wanted to improve my vocal technique. Since then, I usually practise with a friend at home twice a week to work on breathing and pitch control.

제안: Organise your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking phrases (for example, ‘when I’m cleaning’ or ‘while studying’) and correct grammar. Be specific about which activities you pair with music and why.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play K-pop or rap when I clean the house because the fast beat gives me energy, while I prefer softer music when I do homework or get ready for bed because it helps me concentrate and relax.

× I prefer happy music because it helps me feel relaxed and give me more energy and live my mood.

✓ I prefer happy music because it helps me feel relaxed, gives me more energy, and lifts my mood.

Subjects and verbs must agree and parallel items in a list must use consistent forms. 'Helps' is third-person singular and should be followed by verbs that match in form: 'gives' not 'give'. 'Live my mood' is incorrect word choice; 'lift my mood' is the correct collocation. Use commas to separate list items.

× I usually listen to K pop and and rap music so I will dance with it.

✓ I usually listen to K-pop and rap music, so I dance to it.

Using 'will' here is inappropriate for habitual actions; use simple present 'dance'. 'Dance with it' is unnatural—use 'dance to it'. Also correct double 'and' and add hyphen in 'K-pop' for clarity.

× Just happy music helps me relax and give me more energy.

✓ Happy music helps me relax and gives me more energy.

Remove unnecessary 'Just'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'helps' must be followed by 'gives' to keep parallel third-person singular verbs. 'Give' is incorrect here.

× I usually listen to rap and K pop music when I fell down or unhappy.

✓ I usually listen to rap and K-pop music when I feel down or am unhappy.

Use present tense 'feel' for habitual actions, not past 'fell'. For 'unhappy' use a verb: 'am unhappy' or simply 'feel unhappy'. Maintain tense consistency.

× It is really have a really useful help me balance my mood.

✓ It really helps me balance my mood.

Original contains redundant words and incorrect structure: 'It is really have a really useful help me' is ungrammatical. Use the simple verb 'helps' with the object 'me' and infinitive 'balance my mood'.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

Add a comma after 'Yes' in written responses for clarity. The form 'Yes, I have.' is correct as a short answer to 'Have you taken any music classes?'. (No tense change needed.)

× I used to attend a music class for two years because I love singing and wanted to improve my vocal technique.

✓ I attended music classes for two years because I love singing and wanted to improve my vocal technique.

'Used to attend a music class' is awkward; 'attended music classes for two years' is clearer. 'Used to' implies a past habitual action but pairing with a specific duration is better expressed with simple past. Keep 'wanted' in past to match the time frame.

× Now I usually practice with my friend at home.

✓ Now I usually practice with my friends at home.

If referring to one specific friend, 'my friend' is acceptable; however, 'my friends' is more natural for regular practice. Also 'practice' is correct present tense for habitual action.

× This. I usually listen to K pop and rap music when I clean my house because it helps me more energy.

✓ Yes. I usually listen to K-pop and rap music when I clean my house because it gives me more energy.

'This.' is not a coherent response; 'Yes.' or 'Sometimes.' fits better. 'Helps me more energy' is ungrammatical—use 'gives me more energy' or 'helps me have more energy'.

× I when I do my homework and get ready to sleep.

✓ I also listen when I do my homework and when I get ready for bed.

Sentence fragment 'I when I do...' lacks a main verb. Add 'listen' and use natural phrasing 'get ready for bed' rather than 'get ready to sleep'. Include 'also' to connect to previous thought.

× I prefer listen to to music to concentrate and relax.

✓ I prefer listening to music to concentrate and relax.

After 'prefer', use the -ing form 'listening' when followed by a verb phrase. Remove the duplicate 'to'. The structure 'prefer listening to music to concentrate and relax' correctly expresses purpose.