Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms, articles, and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases.

예시: I prefer happy music. Because I am generally a cheerful person, upbeat songs lift my mood and make me want to dance. For example, I often listen to pop playlists when I work out because the fast tempo keeps me energetic.

제안: Be more specific and coherent: answer directly, then give a clear explanation with one or two concrete details or examples. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for instance' and avoid vague or repetitive adjectives.

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because of its fast tempo and positive lyrics. For instance, when I listen to upbeat dance tracks, I feel more motivated to exercise and my energy level increases.

제안: Clarify meaning and use correct grammar: give a clear direct answer (Yes/No) and explain briefly why, using specific reasons or examples. Avoid idioms used incorrectly and irrelevant details.

예시: No, I have never taken formal music classes because I was more focused on academic subjects at school. Instead, I learned a little from listening to online tutorials, but I have not studied an instrument or voice formally.

제안: Structure your reply: answer the question first, then give specific examples of activities and any exceptions. Use clear, common vocabulary and avoid confusing idioms or contradictions.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing household chores and cooking because it makes the tasks more enjoyable. However, when I'm commuting or relaxing in the evening, I sometimes prefer podcasts or audiobooks instead of music.

× Honestly, it's depend upon my mood, what I'm having at that day.

✓ Honestly, it depends on my mood and what I am feeling that day.

Verb form error: 'it's depend' is incorrect because the subject 'it' requires the third person singular present form 'depends'. 'Depend upon' is acceptable but 'depend on' is more natural. 'What I'm having at that day' is awkward; use 'what I am feeling that day' or 'what I feel that day' to match present continuous/ habitual context.

× Music is not a cup of my tea.

✓ Music is not my cup of tea.

Incorrect collocation and article order: the idiom is 'my cup of tea' not 'a cup of my tea'. Use the fixed phrase to convey preference.

× But I like to listen music which is mostly happy because I'm generally a happy person and happy music make me feel like dance, make me feel like World War 2 nice day.

✓ But I like to listen to mostly happy music because I am generally a happy person and happy music makes me feel like dancing and makes me feel like it's a nice day.

Multiple issues: 'listen' needs the preposition 'to' (verb + to-infinitive). 'Mostly happy music' order corrected. Subject-verb agreement: 'happy music make' should be 'happy music makes' (third person singular agreement). 'Feel like dance' requires gerund 'dancing'. 'Make me feel like World War 2 nice day' is unclear and ungrammatical; revised to 'make me feel like it's a nice day' to be meaningful.

× So I think I preferred happy music as compared to sad music.

✓ So I think I prefer happy music to sad music.

Tense and comparison: 'preferred' is past tense but the meaning is general preference so use present 'prefer'. Use the standard comparative 'prefer A to B' rather than 'as compared to'.

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited.

Subject-verb agreement: 'happy music' is singular idea and requires 'makes' (third person singular present).

× Additionally, I think happy music happy, charismatic and lyrically nice as compared to sad music.

✓ Additionally, I think happy music is cheerful, charismatic, and lyrically nicer than sad music.

Missing verb 'is' needed to link subject and adjectives. Word choice: 'happy' repeated is redundant; use 'cheerful'. Use comparative 'nicer than' for 'lyrically nicer than sad music'.

× And whenever happy music is played, I like to be in a story that stays.

✓ And whenever happy music is played, I like to imagine a lasting story.

Original sentence is unclear and awkward. 'Be in a story that stays' is not idiomatic. Rephrased to 'imagine a lasting story' to preserve likely intended meaning.

× Nor as it is not a cup of my tea, I have not picked any music classes and when I was in school music were not heard as well as when I completed my bachelor degree, music were not 13 hours school.

✓ No, since music is not my cup of tea, I have not taken any music classes. When I was in school, music was not offered, and after I completed my bachelor's degree, I still did not take music classes.

Several errors: 'Nor as' incorrect connector; use 'No' or 'Because'. 'Picked' is wrong verb; use 'taken' for classes. 'Music were not heard' is ungrammatical — use 'music was not offered' or 'we did not have music classes'. 'Bachelor degree' requires possessive 'bachelor's degree'. Remove nonsensical phrase 'music were not 13 hours school' and replace with clear statement. Modal/auxiliary choices corrected.

× Additionally, music is not my cup of petite.

✓ Additionally, music is not my cup of tea.

Wrong word 'petite' used instead of 'tea'. Use correct idiom 'cup of tea'.

× I would like to prefer as com other things as compared to music.

✓ I would prefer other things to music.

Awkward redundancy: 'would like to prefer' is incorrect; use 'would prefer'. 'as com' is meaningless; remove and use 'other things to music' for standard comparison.

× Yes, I do listen to music while doing all the things.

✓ Yes, I do listen to music while doing many things.

Awkward 'all the things' — use 'many things' or 'various tasks'. Tense is fine but phrasing improved for natural English.

× There are different household thing I would like to do while listening music but sometime whenever I'm out I would like to probably watch movies or listen to podcasts as compared to music.

✓ There are different household things I like to do while listening to music, but sometimes when I'm out I would rather watch movies or listen to podcasts than listen to music.

Pluralization: 'thing' should be 'things'. 'Listening music' needs 'listening to music'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Word order and comparison fixed: use 'would rather A than B' for preference. Removed redundant 'probably' and 'as compared to'.

× As I already mentioned, it is over the moon and not much coffee for tea and that's all.

✓ As I already mentioned, I really enjoy it sometimes, but overall it's not my favorite, and that's all.

Contains mixed idioms that make no sense ('over the moon and not much coffee for tea'). Replaced with clear, grammatical statement that likely reflects intended meaning: enjoyment at times but not a strong preference.