Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with correct verb forms and a linking phrase. Avoid filler sounds like “mmm” and repeated phrases.

예시: I prefer happy music because it instantly improves my mood and helps me relax. For example, upbeat pop songs lift my energy after a long day, and their lively rhythms make it easier to focus on tasks.

제안: Avoid repeating earlier words and fix grammar (e.g., “makes” → “make”). Give a brief direct answer then add a specific example or reason using a linking word like “because” or “for example.”

예시: Yes, it does, because upbeat songs increase my energy and motivate me to move. For example, when I hear a fast tempo song, I often start tapping my feet and feel more enthusiastic about exercising.

제안: Provide a clearer timeline and use past tense consistently. Remove fillers and give one or two specific details about what you learned or enjoyed. Use linking words like “and” or “so” to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I took music classes when I was a child. I learned basic singing and dancing, and performing in front of classmates helped me become more confident.

제안: Be concise and correct verb forms (“recharge” → “recharges” or rephrase). Give one specific example of the type of music you choose for each activity and use linking words like “for example” or “especially.” Avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing housework and exercising because it improves my mood. For example, I play upbeat pop while cleaning to stay motivated, and upbeat electronic tracks when I work out to keep my energy high.

× MMM well I prefer happy music because it can put me in a good mood and.

✓ MMM, well I prefer happy music because it can put me in a good mood.

Unnecessary period split created a sentence fragment; maintain present simple tense 'prefer' and modal 'can' together. Remove the extra period and add a comma after MMM to improve flow. Grammar_problem_type_id:6

× It also recharge my batteries when I feel stressed or sad.

✓ It also recharges my batteries when I feel stressed or sad.

Subject-verb agreement in present simple tense requires third-person singular 'recharges' with subject 'it'. Use 'recharges' not 'recharge'. Grammar_problem_type_id:6

× Yes, of course, as I told before, happy music can makes me feel happy and it puts me in a good mood when I feel sad.

✓ Yes, of course, as I told you before, happy music can make me feel happy and it puts me in a good mood when I feel sad.

After modal verb 'can' use base form 'make' not 'makes'. Also add 'you' after 'told' for completeness: 'told you before'. 'Puts' is correct for third-person singular 'it'. Grammar_problem_type_id:2

× MMM, yes of course. When I was a child I had umm music class.

✓ MMM, yes, of course. When I was a child I had music classes.

Use plural 'music classes' if referring to repeated lessons; 'class' could be singular if one class but context implies multiple sessions. Also add commas for natural speech. This concerns noun number (singular/plural) which affects past-tense meaning; adjust to plural here. Grammar_problem_type_id:5

× It was really happy and I can sing and dance in front of many people.

✓ They were really fun and I could sing and dance in front of many people.

Referring to 'music classes', use plural pronoun 'they' and adjective 'fun' rather than 'happy' for classes. Because the action happened in the past, use past modal 'could' instead of present 'can'. This corrects tense and pronoun reference. Grammar_problem_type_id:6

× I listen to music when I do housework and when I do workout because it helps me in a good mood and recharge my batteries. Batteries.

✓ I listen to music when I do housework and when I work out because it helps put me in a good mood and recharges my batteries.

Use 'work out' (phrasal verb) instead of 'do workout'. 'Helps put me in a good mood' is more natural than 'helps me in a good mood'. Maintain subject-verb agreement with 'recharges' for 'it' or rephrase to 'recharges my batteries'. Remove the duplicate 'Batteries.' Also keep present simple tense consistent. Grammar_problem_type_id:6