Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct grammar (these → this/they), and add a brief specific example or reason. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax when I'm stressed. For example, upbeat pop songs calm me down and lift my mood after a long day.

제안: Open with a direct yes/no and a topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with correct grammar and linking words. Remove repetition and fix verb forms (listening → listen; this makes → it makes).

예시: Yes, it does. When I follow my morning routine of walking along the river, upbeat music energizes me and helps me feel more positive for the day.

제안: Provide a clear, accurate statement about the instrument and avoid confusion. Use correct vocabulary (electric keyboard, electronic keyboard, or electric piano; bass pedal) and concise structure. Omit fillers and broken sentences; explain briefly what you learned.

예시: Yes, I have. I practiced on an electronic keyboard, which has two manuals, and I also learned to use a bass pedal with my foot.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then contrast study time with exercise time using linking words. Correct grammar (want → prefer; listening → listen; energetics → energizes) and finish the thought. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I usually prefer to focus when I'm studying, so I don't listen to music then. However, when I walk or exercise, I like to listen to music because it energizes me and helps me keep going.

× I prefer listening to happy music, uh, when I feel stressed and depressed.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music when I feel stressed or depressed.

Use of 'and' implies both feelings together; native speakers usually say 'stressed or depressed' to indicate either state. Also remove redundant filler 'uh' and the comma before 'when'. This keeps simple present tense consistent.

× Uh, these music makes me more uh, relaxed and feeling better.

✓ This music makes me feel more relaxed and better.

'These music' is incorrect: 'music' is an uncountable noun and takes 'this' (singular) not 'these'. Verb must agree: 'makes' is fine with singular, but follow with bare infinitive 'feel' rather than 'feeling'. Streamline fillers.

× Yes it does, especially when I walk along the river as a morning as my morning routine.

✓ Yes, it does, especially when I walk along the river in the morning as part of my routine.

Use 'in the morning' for time of day and 'as a morning' is incorrect. 'As part of my routine' expresses intended meaning. Add comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I like to listening to upbeat music because this makes me energetic and I'm feeling much better.

✓ I like to listen to upbeat music because it makes me energetic and I feel much better.

After 'like to' use the base verb 'listen' not 'listening'. Replace 'this' with pronoun 'it' to refer to music. Use simple present 'I feel' rather than progressive 'I'm feeling' to state a general effect.

× I used to practice playing electric electron like, uh, piano, but it has 2. Keyboards and I have also base need to be put pushed by my foot.

✓ I used to practice playing electric instruments like the piano, which has two keyboards, and I also used a bass that needs to be played with my foot.

Original has several errors: 'electric electron' is wrong word choice; 'electric instruments' or 'electric piano' is correct. Numbers should be written 'two'. Clarify 'bass' and correct verb forms: 'needs to be played' (present simple passive) describes instrument operation. Keep past habitual 'used to' and match tense.

× No, I don't. I usually uh, want to focus on one thing, especially studying, but when I walk or exercise, I like to listening to I like to listen to music while doing it because it energetics me and.

✓ No, I don't. I usually want to focus on one thing, especially when studying, but when I walk or exercise, I like to listen to music while doing it because it energizes me.

After 'like to' use base verb 'listen'. Remove repeated phrase. 'Energetics' is not correct; use verb 'energizes' in simple present to describe regular effect. Remove trailing 'and' and filler 'uh'. Ensure sentence structure is complete.