Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like "strong ability of resonation" and grammar errors such as "listen the music". Use simpler, accurate expressions (e.g., "I empathize easily"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood and energy. For example, when I hear upbeat tunes I feel more motivated and less stressed, so I usually choose cheerful songs when I need to relax or work.

제안: Be direct and organized: begin with a clear yes/no and a brief reason, then give a specific example. Correct grammar ("when I listen to" not "when I listen the") and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like "for example" or "however" to show contrast when needed. Also clarify "unconcentrated" as "distracted." Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, happy music makes me feel more energetic. For example, I often listen to upbeat K-pop while studying, but because it's lively and catchy I sometimes get distracted and lose concentration.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing: say "I took piano lessons for 12 years" and "I learned guitar for three years but haven't practiced it recently." Avoid hesitations and incomplete endings. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have taken instrumental lessons. I took piano lessons for twelve years and I also learned guitar for three years, although I haven't practiced the guitar much lately.

제안: Provide a clear, well-structured answer: start with a direct reply, then give specific habits and reasons using linking words. Correct grammar ("when I'm studying", "doing housework"). Explain how you organize music choices to fit activities. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. Earlier I used to play music while studying or doing housework, but now I group my playlists: for focused work I listen to calm piano pieces, while for chores I choose upbeat tracks.

× I think I like happy music more because I have a strong ability of resonation, so if I listen the music which I feel sad or sorrowful, I will be more emotional because the music will bring me to the emotion and the melody.

✓ I think I like happy music more because I have a strong ability to resonate, so if I listen to music that makes me feel sad or sorrowful, I become more emotional because the music brings out the emotion and the melody.

Error type 8 (Verb + -ing form): 'ability of resonation' is incorrect word formation; use the verb phrase 'ability to resonate'. Also 'listen the music' needs the preposition 'to' before the object (this is a preposition error but corrected within the same sentence for fluency). 'Which I feel sad or sorrowful' is awkward; use a relative clause 'that makes me feel sad or sorrowful'. Use present simple 'become' for general truth rather than 'will be' in this context. Suggestion: practice verb + to-infinitive after 'ability' and use 'listen to' with objects; prefer 'that makes me' for causal clauses.

× Yes, I will feel more excited or energetic when I hear the when I listen the happy music.

✓ Yes, I feel more excited or energetic when I listen to happy music.

Error type 6 (Present tense issue): The sentence used 'will feel' and duplicated fragments 'hear the when I listen the', which is incorrect for habitual actions. Use the simple present 'I feel' for regular reactions and 'listen to' with the preposition. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and remove repetition.

× And for instance when I studied I usually listen to music and my preferred is K pop and all the music in the K pop the most of them are happy and rock excited.

✓ For instance, when I study I usually listen to music and my preference is K-pop; most K-pop songs are cheerful and energetic.

Error type 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs): 'my preferred is K pop' uses wrong form; use noun 'preference' or adjective 'preferred' with a noun. 'Happy and rock excited' is ungrammatical; use adjectives like 'cheerful' and 'energetic' or 'rock-influenced and energetic'. Also tense consistency: use present simple 'study' for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'preference' for a noun and choose appropriate adjectives to describe music style.

× So I will be unconcentrated about this.

✓ So I become distracted by it.

Error type 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns): 'unconcentrated' is not a natural adjective and 'about this' is an awkward prepositional phrase; better to use 'distracted by it'. Also use present simple 'become' for habitual result. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'distracted by' to express loss of concentration.

× Yes, but it's instrument classes. I, I had learned piano for 12 years and oh, I, I learned guitar for three years, but I don't proceed then to for a long time.

✓ Yes, but they were instrument classes. I learned piano for 12 years and I learned guitar for three years, but I did not continue for a long time.

Error type 5 (Past tense issue): Mixed and incorrect past forms: 'it's instrument classes' should be past 'they were instrument classes' to match the context, 'I had learned' is unnecessary past perfect; simple past 'I learned' is appropriate. 'I don't proceed then to for a long time' is ungrammatical; use past tense 'I did not continue for a long time.' Suggestion: use simple past for completed past activities and avoid unnecessary past perfect; use 'continue' with correct tense.

× So I just have.

✓ So I just stopped.

Error type 26 (Sentence structure errors): 'So I just have.' is an incomplete and unclear sentence lacking an object or verb form; likely intended to mean 'I just stopped (playing)' or 'That's all I have.' Use a complete verb phrase 'I just stopped' or 'That's all.' Suggestion: ensure sentences have subject and a clear verb and object when needed.

× Yes, just I talk to you.

✓ Yes, I'm just talking to you.

Error type 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns): Word order and tense are incorrect: 'just I talk to you' should be 'I'm just talking to you' to indicate the current action. Suggestion: use auxiliary verbs for present continuous and place adverb 'just' before the main verb.

× At previous stage I would usually listen to music when I studying or do something how do some housework and but now I will separate my music to different groups.

✓ Previously I usually listened to music while I was studying or doing housework, but now I separate my music into different groups.

Error type 6 (Present tense issue): Tense inconsistency: 'would usually listen' is OK for past habit but mixed with 'when I studying' (missing auxiliary) and 'do something how do some housework' is ungrammatical. Use past simple or 'used to' consistently for past habits: 'Previously I usually listened' and 'while I was studying or doing housework.' For the present habit, use present simple 'I separate my music into different groups.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for past vs present and use correct verb forms (listen to, study -> studying with auxiliary, do -> doing).

× When I need to concentrate I will listen piano music.

✓ When I need to concentrate, I listen to piano music.

Error type 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions): 'listen piano music' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also use present simple 'I listen' for habitual action rather than 'will listen'. Suggestion: use 'listen to' + music type and simple present for habits.